All Comments on 'Persistent'

"I want to taste your soul" is a powerful hook.

or fake it till u make it. TK U MLJ LV NV

You show an intimate use of off rhyme, which is a talent in itself and the content is strong and mind blowing. Loved this poem! Good work!!

~ maria

The words, inside, deep, swallow, taste, need etc. give it an erotic tinge, but the need seems much more emotional than physical. Well done.