by RhymeFairy
Well...I'm pretty sure the boat referred to isn't the Good Ship Lolipop. I have to say - I liked this poem. Didn't understand it all - but I liked it!
may prosper. I guess it depends on what you are telling, and to whom.
I assume we pimp ourselves out in many ways... such as work <grin and then there is sex <biggergrin' (~_*) a super, erotic read!
some interesting inner rhymes in this one. You could lose the word "seizures" and rework the line breaks to make it more effective. I liked this one a lot-- good work :)
Hopped on the train and enjoyed the ride.
I like gutsy poetry that doesn't stumble
and ends with a well chosen close at
the right time.
There's a couple of things I might change
but, I'm not going there right now.
I just wanted you to know this worked
for me.
andy