All Comments on 'Reality'

Truly awful, there's no flow, no rhythm and the rhymes are so forced as to be painful

Some of the ideas and concepts are interesting but aren't developed well enough and the language is too much of a mix of archaic constructs and modern constructs which jar and make no sense

Do you really have any idea what poetry actually is? because this is not it

I do have to say, this is one of his better poems. Here's a little hint to writing poetry. Write it how you'd say it. Comas and the end of the line are used as breaks. Read it out loud when you proof read it. It makes all the difference in the world.