by darkmaas
Oh I say :) naughty Aunty midst the cucumber sandwiches and Earl Grey tea :)
Leave the shit alone! Only a twit has the need to rewrite other peoples poems.
I have never had such a conversation with a relative that I wasn't married to. Actually I never had that conversation with him, either. Things are steamy up North, eh? I liked the shadow of your smile.
is great, we'll allow for the Aunt actually saying that, however the end line comes off to me not as an unhammered nail, but one that has actually fallen out of the hole.
Cossack> samovar (good)
Cossack.> samovar> cello?
Musician > polished wood (I changed mahogany).>cello
end refers back to the beginning
just my take
5ed
Reading this I cannot help but imagine I am sitting in the parlor on a rather uncomfortable horsehair stuffed chair, sipping my tea and observing this exchange. Love this - and read aloud it's even better.