All Comments on 'tease'

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PrincessErinPrincessErinover 15 years ago
Good

Very sensual, good use of words.

WickedEveWickedEveover 15 years ago
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I like how it ends with connection and, yeah, drop "over" in the first line.

champagne1982champagne1982over 15 years ago
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The only thing that could have made this even better would be if the poet had caught the repetition of over in the opening. Sure, there's some small use of popular phrasing in this but I really think the cliche is balanced by the unique view and well-written bondage theme. It's good.

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