All Comments on 'Winter Sun'

Great lines, but I couldn't transition to the last stanza with you because I didn't see how you got there with what preceded it.

.....prose-like for me but, as GMM said, some nice lines.

Tess + 4

did u know that a long time ago, in NY, I think, a molasses tank broke and flooded the town and killed many people, it seems they could have outrun the so-called flood.

"like molasses" when used in connotation with anything slow is pure cliche. If that is the best u can do, smoke a blunt and chill, maybe something will cum to u

I thought I was the only one who ever heard of that. It was in Boston, January 15, 1919. 21 people were killed and 150 injured. 2.3 million gallons of the gooey stuff rushed through the town at a speed of 35 mph.

No comment on the poem, sorry, I did not get it either. There were some good lines as mentioned before, but of what use are good lines when the sum of the parts makes no sense?

~ maria ( couldn't sign in on my regular user name)