All Comments on 'A Birthday Surprise for Ricky'

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ileeana38pileeana38pabout 15 years ago
Story was ok but......

You story was very intriguing but to short...it could have used a little more build up and a little more playing for the 3-some but otherwise i liked it...keep up the good work.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Not bad, room to improve

Not a bad story, but some of the details would be clearer if the paragraphs were more concise. If you switch characters who are performing an action or saying dialogue, it's probably a good idea to start a new paragraph. Also, the external ejaculation and the lubeless anal sex make this story seem like a porn movie in text form.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
awsome story

that was the best story i've read on this website great descriptions

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