All Comments on 'A Christmas Pick up'

Loved the story & hope you continue writing these stories.

either get an editor or reread it yourself after a few days cooling off. You changed tense in the middle of a paragraph and back again. From "I" to "him" and back again in the middle of the story. Not earth shaking but a little disruptive when reading. It interrupts the flow of thought and your word picture is blurred. I liked the story.