All Comments on 'A Cold Drink for my Mistress'

So let me see if I have this straight. You made a male sub into a feminized sub and then proceeded to mentally diminsh him/her to make him/her into what you "could be proud of." And what, pray tell, is that. Furthermore, the idea that some cross-dresser would be mentally destroyed by being seeen outside is preposterous. MAke the plot engaging, take on his journey with him, help us to see what demons drive the two of them and then we'll enjoy this story.

You are very good. The story effected me in a very special way. Please, keep writing.

You were getting off to a good start, then it's like you remembered you had an appointment and kicked out the last 3 paragraphs without any regard for the pacing of the beginning of the story. First 3/4 is nice though, keep at it.

I like the capitalisation.

Yes, but why aren’t names capitalized ( e.g. -“rachel”)?