All Comments on 'A Dark Night with a Dark Stranger Ch. 06'

I like how you have added alittle background on Ragon and how he felt the first time he saw Bell. The tension between Ragon and Bell is great, each so unsure of the other. I still have a major dislike for Clyde. And now a party, what problems could this create? You have made each chapter better than the last and now I'm eager for the next.

I am loving them all and so looking foward to the next, I do agree with the other commenter about clyde but kiara is still the one I hate most. The dirty bitch needs to leave him alone or die. She has a whorehouse of both sexes, why can't she just be happy for him, oh right, greedy whore i forgot. eh oh well. Please hurry with the next, I check daily for the new one, love your stories, keep writing. You rock.

I hopr bell doesn't fall for that asshole. Ugh ragoon needs to say something to bell and stop being dumb ot else clyde is going to mess with her.

But PLEASE get an editor! The awful grammar and skipped, misspelled or just plain wrong words are driving me crazy. I have intentionally NOT rated any of the chapters, hoping each time (in vain) that the writing would get better and I could give you a decent rating. After six chapters, your writing has not improved at all.

Please don't try to tell me that correct grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc. don't matter, or that they inhibit your creativity. If you can't write creatively AND correctly, you are not really a writer. You tell a good story, but the mistakes will have people who DO care about the technical quality of the writing dropping like flies away from this series. Every time I see a mistake, it takes my mind off the story for just a moment. That is how you lose readers.

And to all of you who are going to jump on me for being a grammar nazi, let me say that I "get" why you don't think it's important. I must respectfully point out that, based on your comments, you probably don't notice the mistakes because you write in much the same way. You can bicker all you like about how much you hate this or that character, but that doesn't do a thing to improve the quality of the writing.

PLEASE do yourself and your readers a favor and get an editor. At the very least, have a friend read over the chapter before you submit it. I really WANT to be able to continue to enjoy this series!

Here is a good tip if you have to edit your own work. Read it backward sentence by sentence that way you do not auto correct the work. You will see 95% of the errors. Otherwise, I am loving the story. I look forward to reading more.

Not jumping on you missjez, see my way is I just prefer to pick a section, read the definition and decide if my imagination will enjoy. No, I do not care about all the periods, comma's stuff because, this is a place for people to share their idea's and joy's of writing and that does make them writers in my opinion. I talk about characters in the story because that is why I come here. or the story, not perection, and I also believe how you learn to better yoursel is not just an editor but experiance and the writer has said beore they are searching for one. They are writer's, just because its not book perfection does not mean they are not. Practice, experiance, ect, teach. I can not spell hal the time, but it does not phase me really, so, if I can uderstand the story and read then that is good for me, I want for my imagination. This place as I see it is for learning and enjoyment, ect. Other wise they would be paid for it. When I want perfect grammer or whatever I pick one of my books, but I prefer here just because its fun and has anything storie wise I could possible want. So, yes we do bicker as you said about the people in the story because we enjoyed the story and like talking about it. Take this wrong, take this well. Just explaining my reason for being here. Pleasure and imagination. Enjoyment and so on.

Love your story, the characters, the plot, everything. I am not picky about grammar although I'm sure some people are, you are a fantastic writer!

And am I the only one who, when Sandra talks hears Paula Deen in their head?

But I hope this doesn't turn into one of those stories where the two main characters take forever to just say how they feel to each other rather than just assume what the other is thinking/feeling...thus prolonging everything.

It's a good story with some new and interesting plots involving vampires (vampires playing charades is a first for me ;) ) that I would hate for this to be drugged around because the two main characters are too weak to say how they feel..just my own opinion because I see a lot of stories doing this and as someone who tells people how they feel, this irks me to no end... :)