by RandomStorywriter01904
I agree with the other guy short and to the point. I suggest you make it longer or make another chapter and maybe make her a futanari for more play.
It might get better if I made it longer, but it might also become worse. I always fail to see why stories don't get into the main storyline as soon as possible. That's just the way I am. Short and to the point is my natural way of writing, so I won't be doing things any differently in that respect. Sorry.