All Comments on 'A Guy Who Wanted Too Much'

Ok I am hooked! I will have to stay up and check for your next chapter. I am intrigued with your casting and look forward on how you will play out the game.

I know that when I see "Edmont Grigor" as the author of a tale it would be well worth giving the story a try. Thanks for your efforts in writing.

Please finish this story. I know at one level it is finished but it was the end of a chapter, not the end of the story.

When you write in the style where the reader is to remember facts and then later incorporate those facts into understanding the authors meaning it is SO VERY IMPORTANT not to make spelling, tense, gramatical, or word choice errors. Those kinds of mistakes destroyed this story. To read a line ment to establish character intent and then realize that you used the wrong characters name is an unforgivable editing error. anon jerry

This deserves an ending, not people riding off into the sunset. I don't blame Darby but I love happy endings.

Yes, I realize that it is just a story and I like endings on my stories.

Writing, grammar, continuity...

I’m not sure what, but it was definitely something. The story started out making absolutely no sense at all. And then when I thought it was coming together, kinda making some sense, it all went crazy again and blew up. It just took a strange turn. And then, BAM!!! It slammed into a brick wall and stopped dead. No lead up, no real sense that it was coming, it just stopped. Like I said, crazy strange.