All Comments on 'A Lovers Promise'

Very good story and could see how this could really happen in due time considering the circumstances of all that had happened. Thanks. JAG/TSO

....combination of under the sink products are you sniffing? This was laughable,especially the line about "they would never forget her"!!!Really,never forget her? How about,"they were fucking devastated"!!!"Son,I noticed you sniffing my wife's (and your step-mother's,)panties! I know just what to do!"-no effort at all here-pistolpackinpete

kind of weak but good, i'm surprised you didn't take it futher it needs that.

The ending was to obivous thru the story.

The writing is poor and unedited; The premise is unique, but grossly undeveloped; The character development is unimpressive.

There is nothing wrong with a short and sweet story, but if you're going to write something short do not back it with a story line that leaves so much emotion and so many questions unexplored.

You have the potential to be a decent writer, but you need more work and better focus. I'd like to see you rewrite this and do a much better job.

For a one-page effort, you need not have bothered with such a drawn out back-story.

So that is the way a father would treat his own son's twisted sexual fantasy by allowing him to carry it all the way to fruition ? What the fuck kinda of father would ever do that ? Does this asshole having any morals at all and does have just a tad of respect for his wife ? Of course that would a resounding NO to both the former and the latter,

I beseech the author to attempt to write something that actually is morally uplifting which is far from this story.

This story is more of a fantasy than reality.

Ha! Father of the year right there. I'm sure Sara is smiling as she watches from above.

Too bad the story is unfinished as the storyline had good flow. 4/5

She’ll be a whore for him.