All Comments on 'A Stalker vs. A Serial Killer 02 Ch. 01'

"insights into the demented mind of Serial Killers." - should read: "insights into the demented mindS of serial killers." You only capitalize proper names and titles. I mostly just skimmed the big info dump at the beginning, but I couldn't understand what this means: "his only memories of his recent like, were her."

"He was fanatic about it.": "he was fanaticAL about it." OR "he was A fanatic about it."

"For the next hour she rode him." An hour? They had actual intercourse non-stop for one hour? And then she jerks him for ten minutes after that?

Oh, I see. Everyone has intercourse for an hour straight. Are they suffering from priapism?

You have a lot of trouble with commas and periods. An editor would be helpful with that. You may tell a good story, but it's hard to get past all the errors and the hour-long sex.

<b>Breath</b>. Chase whispered in his mind. <b>Breath</b> then speak. Calm yourself. <b>Breath</b> like she taught you.

The word you want is Breath<b>e</b>.

nvm those trolls above, i loved the first part of this series! Still really sad Jacob got killed, but super excited to see what this has in store, gramatical errors or not, who gives a hoot.

Thank you Stalkme.

I do appreciate the love and support, all feedback is good. I didn't realize i was spelling Breathe wrong, so without that anon pointing it out it wouldn't have known it. So, i live and i learn.

Any and all Anon's are welcome to leave comments. I just hope people leave good feedback with the bad. even if you find a mispelling, there had to be something they like.

Thank you again, and keep on reading. You'll like what's to come!