by dirtyjoe69
Your story has been reviewed in the New Story Review thread which can be found at the top of the Author's Hangout in the bulletin boards.
I thought this was a pretty damn good story. A little short but it was well written and detailed too. Certainly started the tingle. Looking forward to reading more.
I thought this was a pretty damn good story. A little short but it was well written and detailed too. Certainly started the tingle. Looking forward to reading more.
You lose the reader and waste all that effort with use of words like site when you mean sight... all that work lost for want of a word and its meaning.