by josie girl
The patience with which you unfold each character, and the depth of understanding of the roles of each positively glows in this work. In my opinion, a very literate and profound exploration of the beginning of this couple's journey. Thank you for this, and I look forward to any future installments.
~Tyr
Excellent beginning to what could become a wonderful, enjoyable novel! The in-depth descriptions of their emotions and physical movements are extremely useful and pleasurable to the imaginative reader.
i only suggest that you be careful when explaining the "true" Dom or "true" submission. Granted it's your story and therefore your view on D/s, however some people who have different D/s relationships may take offense if theirs is not what you have described.
Otherwise, you have created a valuable piece of literature and i greatly applaud your efforts. i look forward to reading more of Phillip and Tess' first and perhaps future meetings.
The only fault in this work is that it is too short.
smiles
i liked your story very much, it was well written and not bad for a first timer. i can't wait to see more of Phillp and Tess.
Grae's wench
You have done an excellent job introducing us to these two. Hope to read more about them-you have a wonderful start. It's been a while since I've read a story that grabbed me by the throat in the grip of its intensity. Great work, hope to read more by you.
Such a wonderful story line. Wish we could all have relationships like that. It seemed so natural. I felt like I was right in the story. Thanks for such a wonderful feeling.
I have read other stories about subs meeting their online Dom for the first time. You really captured the emotions involved in this meeting. Great writing. I loved it.
Hopefully one day I will be able to experience this or something like it.