All Comments on 'Across That Line'

Good start, then the foray into the lifestyle turned it south.

Reread and regraded from 3/5 to 4/5, it may eventually get to 5/5/. It is quite a good story.

Long and winding road.

Garbage just more humiliation and belittling of any male characters to weak honorless, creeps who have zero self-respect, no valor and protray men as cowards with little to no virtue. The woke stories on this site show nothing but contempt for anything masculine dubbing it "toxic" yet almost all of the actions of the "modern" female's in these same stories fall under the very definition of "TOXIC" funny how the definition of words doesn't have to be true to brand it as an insult (toxic masculinity) - especially after 15 pages of toxic feministic propaganda

Started decently then went off a cliff into a river that flowed past the sewage plant. Story was TOO long. The angst the MC endured over and over was too long.

I really enjoyed this. Is there a category for "loving mind games"?

I apologize; I couldn't get past the first page when they were checking in and she ran off for sex with the o!see couple. The guy finishes the check in and takes the bags to their room.

It grossed me out for him to be such a wuss.

Actually, I almost did what previous maderia1076 did for the same reason..I cannot suffer fools or idiots as your MC appeared to be at the start of your story in the hotel..Being unfamiliar with your writing kept me reading to see where it would go.You had him,promptly without any notice left for her,leave to go home and because of that, I ended up reading your tale. It is a good story,I enjoyed it but it was a bit to long going over the same type of sexual lifestyle events needlessly..It hurt the story some...It is a well written and plausible tale..4 stars JZK..

Clever and well-written. Loved the twists and turns and the reality of how people get defensive when they're in the wrong.

A classic. Ashley was too much of a bitch at the end though.

I don't see that she had any right to be angry at Brad for giving her what she wanted because he gave her too much.

Where do you find these so-called men that only have a life threw SEX , the hotel scene would have ended my life with her, and the children crap you have to be kidding? They belong to her and have nothing to do with him, he will allows be the WIMP.!

The Games People play....

The fine line between control and safety

To thrill seeking and almost out of control?

Naw, 5 stars for a great emotional read!

How do we know Ash is truly and forever burned out?

Stupid story and ridiculous ending. I remember now why I quit reading this writer. LM

Excellent story full of plot twists. Needs to be read with an open mind and emotional maturity. I feel sorry for those who can't manage that as they miss out on a very clever tale. BardnotBard

I'll give it 3/5 but wish I could go back in time and just not read it at all. 50k words just to flip the script. This seems like it should've been a 5 page story at most.

A damn good and well written story. It was clear she was hooked and nothing and nobody would stop her from getting back into swinging, except her. And eventually she did, with a some shoving and pushing from Brad. Had a good ending too. 5 stars

Great story, Great song. He sure loved her to go through all of those machinations. The character evolved wonderfully and he certainly chose a unique way of breaking the "addiction". The story also prompts the modern age old question and that are all miserable women femanistas? sometimes it seems like they have fucked up chromosomes. Anyway again a great effort, very entertaining and much appreciated. 5/5

How pathetic was the husband, why do authors try to make the MC if his male to be the most spineless individual possible? ⭐️

A very good 4 Star ⭐⭐⭐⭐ tale! Otherwise, due to a few minor errors, closer to a 5... Ashley, suffered from the old adage " Let sleeping dogs lie". She knew not, what beast she had unleashed, until it was too late. Brad let her manipulate him until he got her right where he wanted her to be. Sadly, at the end, she was still trying to manipulate him with the FemiNazi ally.