All Comments on 'Adventures of Nick Nelson Ch. 01'

A very well crafted story, surprisingly so since the character development is vague. Nonetheless, the action is well-described and vivid. However, it is difficult to get past the fact that they meet and get so hot for each other on the same day. That having been said, thanks for the story and keep up the good work.

A very good start! If the next chapters are as hot as the first one, this should be an excellent story!!

It's not too late to give us a reason for their haste.

Lukas

A great first chapter. I can't wait to read the rest.