All Comments on 'After the Bar'

Need a little work on the typo's (dropped words, etc. - you just can't proofread your work too many times). They weren't overwhelming, but distracting to the reader, especially at key moments. Like "you taste yourself off his cock as a widen you from behind".

Also, not a fan of the cliffhanger ending. Multi-part series are one thing. a single story cut off at the orgasm is something else.

Still, hot topic, good use of second-person narrative. Crisp and compact. Well done, and keep writing.