All Comments on 'All These Years'

Very sad, and in a way incomplete, but still just right. You captured a moment, and made it believeable.

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So, where are the squelching pussy, the drooling lips and the spewing cock? Instead, we have to put up with life, love and disaster with a beautiful, emotional delivery. This is well beyond the purview of most Lit stories. But so well done.

I absolutely concur with oral rex 's comment.

Well written as always, This is the first of your work I have seen criticized so heavily. That is undoubtedly due to people putting themselves in that situation. It is fair to point out here however, that women tend to see the male character as plausible and also that the male character isn’t a coward. The reverse being true when men comment. That does point to the differences between what you (female) wrote and what a Male writer would have done. I understand why you have gone for him holding her at the end but I don’t think that level of affection was needed for ‘But I can finally see how much I stand to lose….’ Him simply saying I love you to much to leave you, but it’ll take time before the intimacy returns, seems more realistic. Michael.

The author in defense of the HUG and wimpness wrote

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But as for him "taking her back." He didn't. Never once did he say so, in fact, he said the opposite... Think of it this way... the whole "getting familiar" with everything--routine, life, etc... is what has caused their marriage to collapse in the first place. <b>It's what she has done, it's what he has done...</b>

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a typical Bitch response. He worked hard and provided. SHE fucked another man or has been for a whule. How are those things the same?

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they have both let familiarity and routine erode their marriage. <b>So what is the first thing they do when they discover the devastating consequences of what they have done? The FAMILIAR. That's the hug. </b>It's not intimacy or reconciliation. It's irony... this is what we humans do, again and again, to sabotage ourselves... the same thing, the same pattern, over and over... and here they go again... yes, it's sad... but it's life. Welcome to the real world? Thank you all for your feedback. Selena </i>

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<b>Husbands that discover the wife FUCKING another man in their martial bed then not showing the least bit of remorse do NOT ever HUG hug their cheating wife 5 minutes after finding out. </b>

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Its speaks volumes that Selena thinks that reaction she write is the real world. holy mother of God what a kook!!!

is so great that people can give high marks for a story about a worthless slut and her hardworking husband.So many authors on this site give as a reason for being a slut the fact that the guy she married is working his guts out to give the slut a good life.

Brava!

I need to fix my own house before... I feel that this could be me, a well done story just needs to finish. I have become a stranger in my own house. My wife loves me ,but I don't what her to feel the need for "Love under new management" I need to fix my own house...

One of the best ever.

It was Nonsense he comes home and he catches her screwing this guy and he says what do we do now dear"?He should tell her "Get out of the my house and live with your boyfriend you slut"!

SELENA,

YOU AND SAWYER BROWN BOTH HIT IT - SAD BUT TRUE -

ENJOY YOU VERY MUCH

THANKS UR FAN ,jack

Eros has many faces, and some of them are dark, sad ... all of them are human.

This is an *erotic* story, in the classical sense.

Thanks.

Loving wives always seems to give people mixed feelings lol just wondering are the ones that are so bitter the ones that have found themselves in similar situations? Did they fix their broken down marriage by kicking someone out of house, home and heart? Did they love the person they kicked out? Did they genuinely feel better afterwards or did they feel like a part of them had been ripped out and dragged behind a horse through a bramble bush? obviously the couple in this story still love each other deeply but they have been hurt. Its hard to say how you would act when you see stumble in on the person you love being in the middle of a sex session in your own home. Personally I think I would get the fuck out of there find a bar and see haw much of jack would fit inside me before my body says its too much then ill think about it. This story does make you think I believe that is what the singer and the writer were trying here. Great story but at the same time not, know what I mean? lol

What a stirring tale...how poignant and heart-rending! How sadly true to life!

What a stirring tale...how poignant and heart-rending! How sadly true to life!

Horrifying and touching. I am suprised with the fact

that most recognized its beauty as more important than

the lack of a satisfactory resolution. Yes, I would love to pet you Kitten, but I have a wife! Used to have a cat, but

losing him was too painful to repeat, losing a wife would be much worse.

This poor man. Still working and striving to provide her with all the things that make her life more pleasant. Dedicating his whole being for her safety, comfort, security and happiness. And his reward? He has only now discovered that the precious work that it took two people, working in concert, decades to create had been destroyed by a wanton, untrustworthy, spiteful being that went so far as to deliberately prepare meals that she knew would be unpalatable to him. A woman who brings strangers into his home and defiles it with unimaginable acts of infidelity and betrayal.

She is a master of illusion. She has kept him working , exerting his all, for a non existant ideal. All the while she is creating new ways to demean him and to destroy that which he thought was most precious to both of them.

He is married to her only in his mind. She has discarded him and his needs a long time ago. She has unilaterally divorced her personal wants and existence from the person who has faithfully cherished her and provided for her in all ways. She used him.

He does not have to hit her. He needs do nothing that would be used to justify her lack of love, concern, and caring. She already has done her worst. Meanwhile he has tried his best.

His first step is a lawyer to begin the legal separation. The next is the best investigator he can find to try to salvage what physical assets she had not yet squandered as she appropriated the family's assets to her personal selfish deeds. He needs the investigator to provide evidence of her infidelities and other misdeeds. Then he needs to consider the children. Are they even his? Whether or not, what does he want to do, how to provide for them?

He can never go back to her. She has taken the love of his life, the purpose of his life. She has destroyed all that he has held dear. Distance may be painful, but the daily contact with a creature so vile, she is still unremorseful and unrepentent, would be much worse and more destructive.

His life has ended.

Thank you for posting this for us.

Like any partnership, just holding up your own end isn't

enough. Sometimes you have to remember the person on the other end.

I hate the cheating stories but this one you got right. Time changes people. You have to be committed to each other and you have to grow together or you both atrophy. I hope this was a wake up call for them. I can see them staying together but it was a very bad way fro his wife to get his attention.

I did get the feeling that she did love him though and was at her wits end as to what to do to get things to change. Some people when they are powerless do negative things to get our attention, hence the lousy cooking. My dog and cats do this as well so it's something life does.

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She fucks around in his bed and claims braindeadedness [read that bored ] but says emotionally "now that I have your attention [huh] please hold me... my loving cuck".<P>

And he says "First let me fill up the tub - then I can hold you - under - for - a while.<P>

How stupidly sensitive with typical female logic from a woman writer no less.<P>

Aha - now we understand - or mostly not.<P>

Kind of a shame this bad - no rotten apple in your "H" portfolio. I wonder why?

This story is not sad and pathetic as everyone seems to think. It is just true to life. "The mass of men," wrote Henry Thoreau, "lead lives of quiet desperation." "By a seeming fate, commonly called necessity, they are employed, as it says in an old book, laying up treasures which moth and rust will corrupt and thieves break through and steal. It is a fool's life, as they will find when they get to the end of it, if not before."

She gave up on the marriage. He didn't. She is unfit to continue as mother and wife. She has proven that she only cares for herself. The reason for monogamy is the guarded passing of genes. By taking someone into her self and into the martial bed, she announces that he no longer is her choice to hold that singular station. But by doing so she forfeits all rights to hearth and home. His only recourse is to ostracize her from all that is part of him. Family and home must be held against her. Family and friends must be told of her actions. Remember they are her actions and they do not impune on his nature. They are her actions vile and corrupt. Unjustifiable. She has raped him in his own bed. His first act of violence should be against that bed, in her presence to show his utter contempt for her. She is a whore to cheap for coin. Wedding vows are very specific. They last until death or dissolution of the marriage. Even were they separated her actions would be adultery. I have read the other posts and some say she loves him? Those people do not know the meaning of the word. If she truly loved him there would be no story. This story for all that it has no proper ending is still a very good story. Weep not for the whore save your tears for those who never gave up on the family as she did.

Liked it makes a point about how people are alawys changing

JOAN @ The JERSEY SHORE

This definitely made me see things a little different, though I still doubt I could forgive her.

This is an interesting take of the problem. It seems that the essential problem with infidelity is the inadequate sense of loyalty in/by the cheating spouse. Everyone can be tempted, can be aroused by a sexy, handsome/beautiful potential sex partner, or simply be seduced by sweet words and sentiments. The habitual partner/spouse hasn't a chance unless the one tempted can put these emotions in the bottle and stopper it. That often requires more than common sense or good intentions. Such interest/attraction is going to be hotter than fidelity will be, thus only strength of character and a powerful sense of loyalty will prevent the disaster. To forgive or not to forgive becomes the central problem for the partner who was cuckolded (M or F) but trust will be the lost dimension of the loving partnership. Because the infidelity may not be obvious at the beginning chances are that it may repeat, becoming easier all the time. Once may be viewed as a mistake by a spouse and has a small chance of being "overlooked." More than once, no.

You captured what I see in many ways. Men often define themselves by their obligations and accomplishments, women by their relationships. In his mind he was meeting his obligations, accomplishing the male role of provider and protector. And he missed that she needed more. But for reasons that are true but not defendable, she couldn't/wouldn't tell him what was in her head. So she goes looking for something more. Not even telling herself what she is looking for. And she finds a substitute for what she thinks she is missing, angry because her husband doesn't see. And everybody loses

Sad

True

Pardon, but I did not read all of the comments...

With that said though, I think the real problem that many couples face is to keep communication open. I dare say that no man (or woman) can even begin to fathom what thier partner needs unless they are talking together. It seems to me that the condo was a badly missed oportunity on thier parts to re-open communications between them, perhaps it was in trouble before that point to some degree.

Had she said something such as: "But I wanted the oportunity to get away with just us two with no nieghbors or anything to distract us so we could reconnect." Or words to that effect, then communications might have had a chance to be re-established. I am sure if he said in return, something like: "I miss spending time with you as well, why don't we go to Hawaii or the Caribean instead? Or Alcapulco? That way you don't have to cook or clean, just be my lover." Such a thing might have thrilled her. Instead, it seems like she looked for that feeling of "connectedness" with some random stranger and reached this empass.

I think we all know how hard it is to reestablish trust once it has been violated, and it is that that adultery often destroys. The question in his mind will be if he can ever truely trust her again. It will take a load of work to save this marriage, if they are commited to it. This does not seem to have been an "open Marriage" or even a couple that had a fantasy on his part of her taking a lover (at least how it was presented). I had a brother who caught his wife in shall we say a comprimised position and he ran both of them naked out of thier house and down the street. Then her lover had the brass to try to sue him for embarassment. The jury laughed him out of court and assigned all legal fees on both sides to him. (A few of them also told him privately that he was lucky not to have been shot by my brother, as they would have exonerated my brother.)

The real question is this, does he love her enough that he is willing to not kick her cheating posterior out? Is she willing to do whatever it takes to earn his trust back? Are they both willing to learn from past mistakes and be honest and talk to each other? Another question that must be going through his mind is if she is so busy with her lover(s), has she been paying attention to what the kids are up to and doing? And what does it say to the kids if one parent demonstrates that it is not important to keep your sworn word?

I am interested to see what the author does with these two and if she can show all of what is needed by both sides to get the marriage back on track.

This reader had nearly given up "Loving Wives", for the pain is too great. This reader wouldn't have seen this title at all, but Selena_Kitt was a contest winner. This was the most different story in her repertoire and this reader wanted to see why she did it. ...and he's happy because he's one that lives on hope.

Sorry but she did too much damage and doesn't seem to understand, she not only broke her word but she did it in their bed and who knows how many times. This will stay with him forever and will make talking to each other that much harder. Sometimes it's easier to move on and he should. Powerful story, a finish would be nice, thanks.

as some of these folks seem to think it is ? This is a very moving story, extremely well written. It makes me feel very uncomfortable but then . . . I suspect that that is what it was meant to do. Congratulations on a fine piece of work and thank you for sharing it.

So many comments trying to parse things...excuses, reasons, motives, bullshit. Forget all the fantasyland bullshit for a second and look at the facts; she cheated, in the marital bed to boot. Whatever happened to bring things to that point are now totally irrelevant since the marriage is now a total fucking farce. Any two people that miserable with each other need to get the hell away from each other and find someone else that makes them happier. All the shades of grey have nothing to do with the reality of here and now, and all the wishy-washy, useless talk changes nothing. It's not rocket science and occams' razor applies, so use it and move on.

or a man's if they are caught cheating. Why? Well, it is his/her fault not the cheaters. Cheating is supposed to get the attention of the person who has failed the marriage. The cheater is not at fault, it has to be the other spouse so they will fogive and forget what the cheater has done. In fact, the logic here is that there was no cheating except by the spouse who failed to communicate, meet the needs of, show enough love for the spouse who cheated. My gosh, who would not want to cheat if that is why they can cheat and not pay any penalty, face any concequences because of course the other spouse is so besotted by them that they can forgive anything, over and over again. What a sexual fantasy that is. I wonder if a man would write a story like this? HMMMMMMM! Great writer, great writing, on a site designed for fantasy, even one that is hard to believe.

this was pure bullshit.

there was no stated, it was just sex, and such dribble. he should have told the guy to wait to take her, and she could leave with just the clothes on her

You captured the bitter truth! Well done.

I gave this a high rating even though I can't claim to like it. Or, maybe I liked it, but didn't enjoy it. It was hard to read, but thought provoking, and well written.

I didn't know the song, so I listened to it before I read your story. Good job of telling the story behind the song. I enjoy the "song-stories" Jake Rivers holds invitation, I hope you enter one. My favorite was "Bed of Roses" by Joesephus... which isn't surprising, I loved all his stories, well almost all.

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You don't imply the final loss here though, and I think that's a shame. I came to this because of your "How to" story about appreciating a man. It was very well done, and I think you missed it here.

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I've been married 40 years, and I know what it takes to make a marriage work. No one is perfect, and we both have to accept that. Still there are a few things that form a bedrock, and the act of fucking another in the marriage bed while cooking dinner... that's the ultimate in disrespect.

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You are right about how little sometimes a person needs from another, male or female. Still, what is needed is needed absolutely. I think you understand it's not the cheating, couples can and do get past that all the time. I mentioned Joesephus' one of the things I loved were his reconciliation stories... but there is no hope here.

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Even more than in the song, she'd let her values fade. It breaks your heart to see so much loss and such failure to communicate. I loved to hate the disrespect of the lover with his promise to continue later. The last ergs of a relationship draining as the husband vented. It's just so sad.

the female writers can express the emotional alternance of a man so much better than a male? I love your writing skills.

As a shrink I have heard tales like this during marriage counseling sessions. Not so lovingly expressed. Not so beautifully written but the same story.

You really nailed the feelings that so many have had in such situations. Well done and a lesson in love and pain for all.

IT SUCKS AGAIN and AGAIN

This had to be written by a woman. Only a woman could so completely write such a wimpy man into the story. Yeah, right so the guy USED to be a man. Bull

Absolutely NO understanding of basic human psychology and behavoir... just a complete waste of time. This is also, not posting in the correct category... since NOTHING in this story is erotic or about a loving wife. Please don't post anymore until you improve.

That was an honest story about two people who love each other and the pain that it causes when one of them makes a mistake.

Thank you for writing

This story evokes powerful feelings but doesn't really do anything with them. It is somewhat unrealistic, given the background on the husband, that he could calmly accept finding his wife in bed with another man. He has a rough and tumble past. He may mature but that past doesn't go away, especially when strongly provoked. Then the author tries to get into the reasons why. What a pathetic exercise but also how realistic. They live a life like millions of others, somewhat satisfying but also with it's disappointments. The failing is entirely hers. She is the one who turned dissatisfaction with her CHOSEN life into a reason to cheat on her husband. So he's not a great listener. Many men are not. A lot of women are completely irrational half the time. Neither issue is a reason for cheating. This isn't a perfect world.. You either accept the conditions you live under or work to improve them. SHE chose to break their marriage. All her reasoning is rationalization. He didn't cheat on her, he is working hard to provide for her, he loves and supports her to the best of his ability. She has a middle age crisis and cheats. <br><br>

The story then effectively stops and the reader is left to wonder, what now? The reader can only answer for themselves, with their own background and feelings. It could range from dropping the bitch and lover into the ground to forgiving her and building a new life together. We don't know enough about the characters to really guess how it will end up. All we can do is fill in the blanks with ourselves. The story is powerful because it does draw us in to that position, wondering what comes next. I personally find it a little unfulfilling because I read a story to get the complete story, not just a taste of one. But some stories are written like this, to deliberately not be complete. The purpose was to evoke an emotion and in that it seems successful.

Pure shit!

Hawkeye you are a rude dude!! But you tell the truth!!! What a peice of crap.

Where is Toby Keith when we need him? Sawyer Brown, my ass! I hate this kind of pure, unadulterated excrement.

Pretty sad. More true to life than most guys will ever admit. Shock and disbelief are much more likely to show up than the standard-ish "I'll kill the twat, and her little dog too! Muahahaha! After I drain the bank accounts into offshore holdings, I can unleash my inner ninja!" scenario found hereabouts. But then, what would be the point of escapism if one couldn't escape the troubles of their world. At least from time to time.

That story is like a molten ball of lead that can't be swallowed or spit out. Amazing ... Selena ... You're absolutely amazing. Your capacity to understand the little moments between human beings and tie them into a big picture with so few words blow me away

the poster who just made that comment about how wonderful this sotry is fucking idiot.

Molly made the offensive charge that she cheated JUST t to get his attention.

so it JIM's fault she fucked other men? If Molly was caught up in the daily grind of life .... so was Jim. If so why was the daily grind for her so bad that she to cheat on Jim JUST to get his attention?

Jim asked why... Molly mentioned his response about his refusal to go vacation. Molly said he missed the point.

then Molly never explained it. If MOLLY is truly sorry doesnt Jim deserve an explanation WHY she cheated ?..

I hadn't intended to sign up for an account here, but after writing this loooong comment to this story, I was told you don't like anonymous comments! So I sucked it up and registered because I very much wanted to tell you what I thought of this haunting story.

I wasn't familiar with the song so I had to look it up on Youtube. And I have to say that you most certainly did justice to a beautiful, painful song with a beautiful, painful story. This is the first story of yours that I've read and I can guarantee I will be reading more...and finding your books to buy, as well. Reading the comments was almost as interesting as reading the story itself. Almost...I confess I couldn't read them all. But I think it is the mark of a great writer that one short story can evoke such strong emotions...whether people loved it or hated it, they were involved in it. That takes talent!

I also confess that I didn't really get that the marriage was over at the end. Being a happy-ending junkie, I was hoping this was the first chapter of one of your books and that the 'rest of the story' would be about how they sought help and sought to reconnect and sought to save this relationship. Is this man's reaction 'realistic'? OK, I'm a woman, so I'm no expert...but I have seen similar situations play out in the lives of people I know, and yes...I do know men who have reacted similarly. I've seen marriages survive infidelity (whether it is the husband or the wife) and some that didn't. But being 'atypical', as you said in one of your comments, doesn't negate the fact that is is a believable reaction. Isn't the whole idea of writing to present couples that are unique and individual? I'm not interested in every story being a carbon copy of every other story. I look for the unique, individual, unusual. And you have delivered.

This is going long, already, but I wanted to comment on your writing style...just gorgeous and flowing. I wanted to quote a couple of favorite lines and realized I would have to quote the entire story! But here are just a couple:

'A man knows the sound of his wife's pleasure. He knows it like he knows the sounds of his house settling, the ticking of the furnace, the creak in the boards by the stove. After a time, it becomes a familiar sound, a comfortable sound, one that carries heat and light, like the lamp that goes on by the front door every night at six.'

And:

'She nodded, and I could feel the edges of her pain flowing into mine, somehow, as if they were one thing. Love didn't stop, like turning off a light switch, as much as I willed it to.'

Just....beautiful.....

Frustrated with this because it was just the start of the story.

different spin on the same old, same old.

i'll rate it a 5 as you asked but to me it was more a 3 or may be a 2.5.

always leave me wondering why do Americans do that to them selves??

never seen the point. oh well.

But I like "B" movies too

I have no idea what that means?

Sorry to say but crap story Only the writing pose made it at all readable BUT try again the writing is there just the plot line was trash

Oh, how I hated this story! Perhaps you should quit listening to Sawyer Brown and try Toby Keith, Merle Haggard, or just about anybody who is in possession of a set of testicles. Sorry, but I could only manage two stars for this one.

. . . the emotions coming out of unknown pores of two souls is just astounding. I know this is an old story for you, maybe I should say older since you are very obviously a lady, but it was new for me this morning. In many ways I have been looking for this one a long time. Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us.

But I will give you 1 five times. Would that be OK?

Aren't some of our readers incredibly shallow? For some, a good 'result' is far important than the story or quality of writing. Sad that in this age their are still so many people around like that.

Great story!

I like to read stories to be entertained and not necessarily to engage in mental gymnastics. Like the water in the goldfish bowl, the fish know it is there and they sure as hell know when it ain't. The story just seems unfinished.

great story. I heard that song before many many times.

But.... How about finishing ... What happens to our couple??

He will be getting a lot of juicy cream pies,,,, and sloppy seconds or maybe thirds. A fairly poor ending,, I'm sorry to say.

This brief story really hit home. I am curious about the future for them but I also am warned about myself and and my own. A time to look inside and see that my partner is fulfilled.

This is not run-of-the-mill erotic literature, but is serious and interesting.

I'd rather see the story without the song lyrics. To me it's sappy and interferes with the story.

This story, by the way, was well told. It was depressing, but in the same was I was depressed when I finally decided to leave my first wife.

A wimpy cuckold husband and a slut wife with no remorse. WACC says it all

Probably shouldn't have read this one since it hit really close to the bone. Really well written and the ache in my soul is because it resonates in me. Especially the comment that it isn't the storms that destroy us but the day to day erosion.

Okay, he comes home to his wife having sex in his bed and he decides to hold his wife and give her comfort? Sorry, not in my playbook.

Yikes - glad this author quit writing this garbage.

Reading some of the comments was really disappointing.

To guys that can't imagine someone love his/her spouse even after seeing the spouse's betrayal: If you don't like a kind of story, well don't read from that kind. It's better for your mental health.

To guys that are looking for an ending for any story they read: Well, I think, maybe the author has had a reason for writing this story without an ending. Just think about it and try to find out what is the reason! And remember that writing stories that include definite endings is not the only style of writing.

It was nice to read a different story of yours Selena. :)

Good work.

Beautifully written, beyond the comprehension of some commentators. Oh well, each to our own level. Well done Selene, great story.

I think some author like you Britease, Selena and a few others underestimate alot of your readers. A lot of commentors understand what you're trying to get across but simply don't agree with what you're saying. No one said the story wasn't well written. But as some one that deal with a lot of family issue for the military, you just don't see the husband sitting down rocking and holding the wife after she just cheated in their bed. I know some of the commentors and authors like to think they have a better insite of human nature, but untill your in that position, it's not the same. Prisons would have so many wife/husband killers if they acted like the guys in the stories, but we know the truth now don't we.

Wh?

I still want to know why.

Why not talk about it first.

Why cheat?

What the fuck

A woman dream the beyond everything forgiving good provider husbands. This dream does not happen in the true World allways...........

This is a very solid story; I think most couples have this moment ... certainly not right after being discovered in flagrante, but after they both realize that they both know what has been going on and there's no point hiding it any longer. And yet ... and yet ... they stay together like they have stayed together through anything else, because it's better to live it with them than without them.

I can understand the shock that they felt. Well written . You captured the moment. Now does someone want to end this. I say no. I do think that readers understand this tale and it is britese that may not understand the reason for some of the comments. It all about their moment too. The reader.

Not very uplifting, but a real life vignette. Fits the song. Well written. Gave it a '4'.Dan

True to the song. Good job.

I understood it, but life isn't that simple. No emotion from the husband? Give me

a break,broken nose for sure, anger at least ,hurt, frustration,fear.. Having been

there, this isn't life. Not a mans reaction.

But some how very incomplete -

She acts like she loves him completely at the end - but she brings the guy to her home and their bed - the ultimate betrayal - and she equates it to his lack of motivation to do something different???

Maybe open her mouth instead of her body to let him know there are issues?? You make him sound like a guy who worked hard to manage his demons and become a better husband and father - then she does this?? no real rationale?? seems highly unlikely and incomplete.

Your writing carries great feeling and passion - I was hoping for more follow through here - she has a reason to do this to them - what is it - really - bored or cinfused does not cut it.

Extremely well written narration of one of most painful infidelity songs ever written. Thank you!

I first read this story two years ago, was taken with its beauty and power, and scored it to the maximum. I came across it this morning when I noticed someone with DFW (my old home town) in his name just commented positively so I read it again.

I am still taken with the skill the writing exhibits. The imagery is constantly vivid. The poor guy carried his baggage to work every day and left wife behind. Most negative comments seem to focus on how hubby has been wronged one time. How about wifey being wronged a lifetime?

All These Years exposes and exploits both of these characters so completely, so purely. I wish I could vote again.

Fucking wimp cuckie crap! Real garbage. This cheating fucking cunt needs some pain and so does the man fucking her in the marriage bed. That "will call you" shit would have resulted inion mediate pain to him. This was not a first time.

I enjoyed the style of your writing; I felt like I was in the room with both of them. However, the story itself left me hanging. Was she sorry for what she did; or for being caught? Is it the end for her and the well dressed man? So many questions left unanswered.

He goes to work each day, doing the same thing 100 times a day every day every year. He sees the same 5 to 20 people every day talks to the same 3 or 4 every day every year. He eats the same 5 to 10 lunches every week every year. The bosses tell him what to do when to do it how to do it every day. But she is the one that is board and jealous. She use this to justify cheating? But she was all confused, her hormones off kilter. We should have pity on her. Fuck him who cares about him anyway not her.

This story is quite old so I doubt the author will bother to notice, but I do have something others might notice. I don't think the husband's a wimp, but I do think the wife is weak. She lacked the strength to confront her husband with her needs and fears so she turned to someone else who was ready to give her the solace she wanted. Her 'lover' may have been a sincere man, but I doubt it. The husband was blind to his wife's personal agonies. He thought he was doing what he was supposed to do; work and bring home a paycheck. He neglected her. This marriage will probably fail. I'd expect it to die a slow agonizingly painful death. They love each other, but like the broken porcelain the author described the damage is done. What we were seeing in this story was ground zero. Both people knew they'd lost. It was a tragic calamity. They both knew it. They both probably knew love would never be enough to repair the irreversible damage.

...actually I don´t understand his reaction. I would have reacted quite differently, I am sure.

You can tell a cheating cunt wrote this garbage.

...of course they are all male so not a surprise. Great theme.ppp

Firstly my apologies for not having come across you and your writing before.

Secondly thank you for a well written and feeling story.

I am male but I can connect with both the characters, having celebrated 47 years of marriage, during which neither stayed "faithful" sexually, but then, we where children of the swinging sixties and lived as we wanted to live, without the hang ups of our parents or our children. At the end of the day love is the only thing that is important in a relationship not possessions or even sex.

but it doesn't explore enough to stand on its own. There's nothing wrong with leaving a story hanging so that readers can visualize their own endings, but this story doesn't provide enough character material to allow that.

Didn't like the characters at all. The lover should been beaten half to death at a minimum. When you go to a married woman's home and have sex in her marital bed without the consent of her husband, you are playing a form of Russian roulette. Any man whether disabled or fit, they would be enraged at the knowledge of a sexual tryst with their beloved wife. This story characterized the husband as a complete idiot wimp jerk. Very unsavory characters to say the least.

I hate how damn real this is. I celebrate your talent. You made so many emotionally immature assholes on this site raise their hand and identify themselves. You wrote the the hell out this shit. 5*

Not long enough to even guess on our own the ending.

She destroyed her husband, her family, her marriage why?

She felt neglected because he was busy earning them a living?

needed more to end it.

5* for different set up, and emotional response. drinking that much booze a week, there is definatly a problem. is that what drove the wife? I see 2 problems maybe three, starting back when wife asked to get away with hubby and he refused, the reason should have been talked about.

Yet another one that can't finish a story.

thought provoking - a lot said in few words

I also, would like to see more of how your characters rationalize their solutions

much more real than most of the stories i read

as i am particularly interested in the motivations of behavior rather than straight cause - effect

looking at your stories/poems page i am hopeing to do a lot of enjoyable reading

authentic, emotionally charged, well written ... Impressive. Five stars.

like actions to remain un-seen, TK U MLJ LV NV

another modern woman, destroying a family on a whim.

Simply because she could. How she must have hated her husband and family.