All Comments on 'Amber's Awakening Ch. 01'

That was amazing! Realistic and hot, I read as if I had no other choice. Please, please, please continue!

That was amazing! Please say there's more to come.

I hope Amber goes after what her heart desires instead of what her parents and society thinks she should do.

You should definitely keep writing it was awesome :) I love the way you told the story - it was very realistic.

Don't write any more

Good writing, good scene setting & good descriptive stuff. Keep it up (I am!) and keep on writing more. Thank you.

Thank you all for your positive comments. :) Don't worry, I will not stop writing because some person I have never met tells me to stop. Chapter two is on the way!

Black Sabbath and tape decks - wow.

Seriously, I thought it was a neatly paced and sensitively crafted beginning to a First Time story. Worth reading just for the line "I knew sucking was involved"! Nice character contrasts between Amber, Cody and the parents. Looking forward to parts 2 & 3.

Minor point. I think your paragraphs are often a bit long for the rolling, backlit screen of Lit. Six to eight lines seem easier to read.

Great stuff, well done and thanks.

This is a wonderful story, and I like even more knowing how much work you put into it. :)

Loved it, especially the very rare, on Lit. feminine outlook.