All Comments on 'An Evening Excursion'

That was HOT!! I love messing about in parks!

You seriously tried to find different words and expressions for everything and you succeeded. You made the sex between them very loving and tender. If that was your intention you succeeded.

On the other hand it was too sophisticate for my taste.

And for me all this sophistication in the writing destroyed even the smallest amount of sleaziness I expect from a story about a man and a woman having sex in a park.