All Comments on 'Anita's Birthday Ch. 02'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
a good fantasy!

It's pretty hot--all of the guys are loving and respectful, complimenting Anita and making it a very special day for her. It's got various errors in the writing, but the storyline is good. Anita's the center of attention and she gets her wish. A perfect fantasy!

Remain_in_shadowRemain_in_shadowover 11 years ago
I think it's the POV

That is a slight irritant in reading what could otherwise be pretty hot.

ythebadgerythebadgerover 11 years ago
You're unlucky

I've just read two excellent new stories and I'm afraid this one doesn't begin to compare.

LickideesplitLickideesplitover 11 years ago
Maybe not THAT excessive!

It is both sounding more elaborate AND more plausible! Just not in my neighborhood! Hot, Hot, Hot!

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