All Comments on 'Annie's Downpayment Ch. 04'

I like the story but how did she get into that situation in the first place, and what happened at the shcool.

Annie is one of the best characters in Literotica!

Please continue her adventures.

Let's see her and the entire high school football team

This is one of the best I have read for years. Deserves to be continued. Hopefully further installments would include husband and eventually ending with a pregnant Annie being cleaned out by husband,

Sir,

You have done yourself proud with a truly great great story. Lovered all aspects of

it. Just wish the Mother would throw the husband out for good, & accept her yearnings to be a Natural Whore.-EATANDBEMERRY

One of the worst. Totally talentless ! "1*" .

This comment has been accumulating over many stories that go back years. Some of the following critique is specifically for your writing and some is for every fucking careless online story that contains these type of errors. Sorry for you receiving the blast for others.

If, then or better than, more than, less than, and worse than. I know it's a tough fight against auto correct but turn it off and and proofread.

Names are switched along with his all of the sudden becoming hers.

I really had a hard time picturing Annie being prone (on her stomach) where it was certain that she was on her back in the scene. If she was on her back she would have been supine.

Last but not least, the characters that are NOT fobs and still speaking pigeon. For me as a reader this doesn't portray the character being under stress or not having to learn English because of a close knit community, it makes me think the writer is ignorant.