All Comments on 'Any Chance We Could Ch. 21'

love this story

I don't know how you do it but you wrote another great chapter about this family. I like how you keep on adding characters into the story so that it does not get boring or flat. I like the new character from the shoe store along with Kim, Hazel, Emerson. I can hardly wait to see what you do in the next chapter with Scott, Veronica, Ashley and Katrina. I like the new names that you've given the girls as far as Minx and Kitten. Keep up the good work.

It took me a little while to remember who Kim was, but finally remembered. It might be helpful for side notes who and how they fit into the story. Another good chapter, and the story as a whole is very interesting, I was wondering how many words the story up to so far? Thanks......Rich

"'Jesus, Hazel, you are so sexy that you already have me hard,' I said admiringly."<p>

...followed just two sentences later by...<p>

"I think Veronica sensed my lust and desire for her."<p>

Gee, ya think?? That Veronica, she sure is some Perry Mason, "sensing" the clown's lust and desire, after he just said straight up to the woman that she's so sexy she MADE HIS DICK HARD!!<p>

Is this author even trying at ALL? I suspect he's sitting back and laughing at you idiots.<p>

"They gave that last bit of horseshit a great score, so let's see if I can sneak this by 'em too! How low will they go? I bet I could write a three page grocery list and these monkeys will eat it up."<p>

You people who keep giving top scores to this never ending cavalcade of poorly written filibuster, what is wrong with you?? This story is completely stuck on stupid. In this chapter he just wasted your time with a page and a half of more unnecessary house nonsense. He's already moving into the other house, who give's a rat's ass if the old house gets destroyed? It's not intrinsic to advancing this story.<p>

People, you're reading FILLER, never ending FILLER! He just keeps adding more people and more and more time wasting crap, just to pad his word count.<p>

Oh, and no, Aardvark & Pooh can't just gather around and watch their parents fuck, even going so far as to suck the cum from their parents' cock and pussy as soon as they're finished, but NOT get fucked themselves. They're sucking his dick and swallowing his cum every five minutes, and they're seeing how much pleasure mom gets from fucking, with their noses literally buried in her pussy as she's getting fucked, but they're not DEMANDING to be fucked too??<p>

The absurdity level of this story blew through DefCon5, fifteen chapters ago.

These stories are penned by average authors who put their imagination out there for the entertainment for the reader. They do not get paid to entertain me and other readers. Those I like, I read and enjoy while those I dislike, I stop reading and use my time elsewhere. Therefore I am perplexed why “Anonymous” wastes his time reading and getting all bothered by a story that he loathes so much.

Such anonymous hit and run artists should take a deep breath, calm themselves and get a life rather than getting so heated and derogatory towards the author and the readers. I am mystified why such commenters do not email the author, provide constructive observations, provide the authors thoughts for consideration, and provide an email address through which they could engage in civil discourse. Yet, I remind myself that we live in a free country where we are allowed to think and speak our mind even if in doing so that which flows forth makes one appear to be imprudent and imbecilic. Dave

DONT LEAVE US IN MID AIR