by Odeon
I loved the story, but if you decide to write again, may I suggest that you consider using an editor? There were many distracting errors, but I have to admit, while distracting, this one made me laugh: "She'd found a pair of white lady's gloves". How did she know the gloves belonged to a white lady? Of course you meant that she found a pair of ladies white gloves, but using an editor (hopefully) would have caught that, along with the other errors.
Hi, and thanks. Love the overall topic, and love your details. Especially the dialog and your insistance about having her tell you everything. Women seldom get that about guys, they just need to know every little thing. A Mars/Venus thing, I guess. Thanks again. and keep it going.
but I'm loving it. Seriously, if this is the kind of sex married couples have, sign me up :D I only hope that this is not a precursor to adultery and diorce. That would roylly suck!
This is a beautiful use of tension, building up to what will become a complete sharing of sexual experiences with "others". Keep it up. Navigating the turn towards action will be tricky.