All Comments on 'Avoiding the Storm Ch. 01-02'

Other than a few errors, this story is building great. Please keep it going.

5 stars

Great Start! Please continue...

Great Start,,,,,,do continue, can't wait to see what happens between Adrian and Zaira my namesake ;)

That was incredible. You have to continue this story. I am totally hooked

Please don't leave us in suspense!!!!!!!

Please update soon and lnger if u could. This is a refreshngly new storey and I think you did a great job

Great story and great start... i cant want to read the next chapter or chapters but can u make it a lil longer!!! I cant wait for the next chapter

I really enjoyed this i already love all the characters theres a lot of twist and turns and i like that it wont be wasy for adrian to get ziara..

I'm already liking the main characters, but the first thing you need is to find an editor. The story as it is now, is disjointed, and whole phrases seem to be missing.

You have my interest peaked and I will be back for more to see what happens.

I really like the story so far, but I think you need to find an editor. I really hope you plan to write more about Zaira and Adrian

I really think you should keep righting it is freakin' awesome

don't be one of them writers who does not finished a story that really good

I want to thank everyone for their comments and encouragement! Don't worry, I will finish the story but I am looking for a trustworthy editor...Someone who understand the story and someone who will not change it for their benefit. I will make the chapters longer, so expect chapters 03-04 in 2-3 weeks (it takes a week just to post the story)! Please bare with me!

Hell Girl You put the Pro In Professional.

I'm definitely taking notes...and I almost didn't read this story.

Wow! Great start I'm loving this story already. I cant wait to read more. Please update soon.

More please

As I sit here at 29 minutes after 1am I am so flustered! I wish. No I crave more more! This is a really excellent story please please don't rush and please don't stoop writing!

Simply Amazing I look forward to reading the rest!!!!

You must continue this story toooo good to be leaving your readers hanging.

I can't wait until the next chapter , and I love how you. Put in the song credit.

and it has so much potential, but it needs some editing. Also, I think bastard in German is unehelich. And I believe that "He's a pain in the ass." is "Er ist ein schmerz im arsch." I hope this was helpful and I don't mean to sound like an ass. I hope you keep writing and posting. -DC

This story so far, please don't let too long go by before posting another chapter.

That's what I call a great start, you've got me and countless others hooked on this story. Please don't make us wait too long for the next chapter, I keep constantly checking back to see if you've updated.

i just love it please , continue soon

Please update soon....great beginning

Love the story so far. But by the looks of things you are another author that is going to be making your fans wait a long time between chapters, and that is not so cool. Would love to see more chapters sooner. Just hope you are not going to be one of those authors who is going to doll out a chapter or 2 every other month or so. That seems to be happening quite a lot lately with three quarters of the authors which is a pitty. Good luck with the story though and hope to see chapter 3 sooner than later.

why is this not in the nonhuman section just like some of the others i have seen inter mixed with were or vamps pick the category that best fits. with this it would be nonhuman as that is the biggest issue in the story.

Onyx is black.

I like the fact that you roped me before I found out that it was nonhuman. Otherwise I probably would have skipped over it...for the time being anyway. I have no real problem with them but the more I read them here, the more they turn out to be much of the same. So I tend to skip over them until I've read pretty much everything else. I will say that I have been pleasantly surprised on more than one occasion.

Just a few things. I believe the phrase is "Mark my words..." I’m sure you’re like me and your brain is thinking faster than your fingers can type. I just want to bring your attention to that in case you missed it. Also, are you saying that his eyes are grey? Onyx is black and for them to be "pale" I'm thinking like a steel grey.

Love this story, love the format, love the everything....fyi fallen or fell not felled

the grammar and syntax makes this story unreadable

the grammar is a little bad but i still really enjoyed the chapters

so she is on the run and she and her son get on a plane to Scotland...ummmm

please explain how a black woman is suppose to blend in especially in Scotland

Totally puzzled by this