All Comments on 'Bait and Switch Ch. 20'

by Dark_Brother

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FseriesFseriesabout 2 years ago

Really don’t like when women exclude the main character from conversations. Essentially excluding him from decision making.

superfeluously_esuperfeluously_eover 9 years ago
NICE!

Now we gotta get Lela into this being that he is a father of a new species....

PornGoddess2PornGoddess2over 10 years ago
Is there any particular reason...

...that you kept switching verb modes between normal narrative and an almost Damon Runyon-esque present indicative mode?

(For those not familiar with Runyon's fiction, the basis for the musical "Guys & Dolls", here's a sample (close approximation, from memory):

"I wonder he does this, but I do not ask him, as persons who ask questions may obtain reputations as persons who wish to find things out."

InfiniteFoldingSpaceInfiniteFoldingSpaceover 10 years ago
So, ok the multiple partner thing

was resolved. That's kinky.

InfiniteFoldingSpaceInfiniteFoldingSpaceover 10 years ago
I just wanted to get kinky, is all

Multiple partners (harem life), leather, submission, bondage, corsetry, exhibitionism, etc are examples of kink. Making her *really* horny was (probably; I certainly don't actually know) my dearly departed Depression-era grandmother's notion of kinky.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Dragon reborn

Death is lighter than a feather, duty is heavier than a mountain

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Im glad you didn't have him dump gina

she was raped because of him if he just leaves her for shanna that would have been just wrong

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Death is lighter then a feather, Duty is heavier then a mountain my ass!

Loving the Jordan, Sanderson and gaming references! Keep up the good work!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Works

I'm surprised to find another author whose favorite works were written by Sanderson and Jordan. Keep up the good work comrade.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

I'm beginning to think youre Brandon Sanderson and use this as a passtime. Great work

LockonLockonover 12 years ago

The quote from the Wheel of Time series is: "Death is lighter than a feather, Duty heavier than a mountain."

redskyesredskyesover 12 years ago
Always a fun read, but...

...you kept switching back and forth from past-tense to present-tense towards the end there. Awkward as hell and ripped me right out of the story at first. Still, all in all, a good read.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
LOVE IT

I JUST WISH HE COULD BE A ONE WOMEN MAN

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

you have the gift of writing

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