All Comments on 'Better off Dead'

To all you people that criticize “anonymous” readers for giving their honest opinions, that is what the writers want. Good or bad, writers don’tcare, if they did they can turn off the comments.

Doesn’t seem anyone has a problem with Adam and the kidnapping and captivity and those “good military friends” doing their part.

I FUCKING LOVE IT!!!!!!! dream scenario right here kidnapped by someone head over heels for me and who will always be mine

I knew Adam was the hero of this story for one simple reason - he drove a Mustang. LOL. Honestly, this story was a wild ride and not your typical "loving wives" content even if it did technically include a cheating wife.

This story? Campy redneck humor gold! 5 stars

This story sucks and I give it one star.

@rblotch66 yes you still can fault her she still cheated pure and simple just like Adam still fucked a married woman just like her husband zeke still cheated on her and her sister still still fucked her sisters husband they all fucking cheated and they all fucking deserve to die just because she was married to a abusive prick who fucked her sister when ever he wanted and just cause her family didn't give 2 shits about her does not mean it can be justified her fucking another man 2 wrongs don't make a right she could have divorced him and cut her family out of her life not seduce and fuck another while still married so yes she is at fault and can be blamed and should be punished for the cheating and the only punishment suitable for cheating is death

Interesting she's still not without guilt she still cheated instead of divorce she chose to fuck another man for 2 years with that being said she deserves to die just like her lover Adam her now ex husband and sister is no better for they was fucking before she was even kidnapped so with that being said they also deserve to die there really wasn't a likeable character between the 4 main characters the lady at the office maybe tela or Damon could have been but they were just side characters not main characters again the 4 main characters were just cheaters who has no damn morals and they all deserve to die

5 Stars on this story . Keep up the good work

I really enjoyed it.

One small legal point, the police can charge a person with a crime without having someone complain about it to them.

This is a twisted, beautiful story.

I was rooting for Adam all along. Victoria got smarter so I can forgive the dumb shot she did. The fact that she didn’t immediately latch onto Adam speaks to her knowing what’s important to her. Can’t fault her for that.

Yes, we KNOW that this is just a story, but it's an extremely STUPID one. Especially the part from where Victoria leaves Adam to go back to her family through to the epilogue. 3* and that's mostly for the beginning of the story.

Newford9b pretty much summed it up.. Da Dang think is just a Story.. freeeeee story at dat . U know likey, write ur own dang story. Weez cod use knew phony balonia lovey doviee storieees with just a touch of an 👁️fer an. 👁️., 👍👍😜😁y'all keep um coming ss6... yeA win some and u don't..,. Later..

Victoria seemed to have a yoyo like IQ, most times STUPID, occasionally capable of improvement, her going back to see her family was MONUMENTALY IDIOT and her not getting out of there (the trailer park) showed a truly astonishing amount of obtuseness.

Not so good.

Do not a lot of these "readers" realize it's fiction. The author can and does write stories. That's all they are. Stories at the end of the day. If these "anonymous" criticscannot understand this fact, then maybe they themselves are just ficticious people Now, having had my little "peeve" this story is worthy of 5 stars, and before "anonymous" complains, this is my opinion

Sorry the whole thing was just stupid

Amazing variation of beauty and the beast.

Happy endings for everyone in the big house.

Geeze i read some of these comments n winder why some of these people come here. If u all think u r so much better get to it. Ill read urs next see how ur doin easy to judge from the other side of the pen. My opinion which is like aholes here we all have em. I enjoyed it thanks for ur hard kno it was appreciated.

would have been 5 stars but you made tela settle for damon instead of a human guy .

Not a likable character in the bunch.

The story was fine until the ending. The lack of any emotions from Victoria when she learned that Adam had "died" kind of soured it for me. She should have been in tears if she loved him so damn much. Way too sterile of an ending.

Great read, so funny!

4. Sweet tale but with a pretty effed up way of getting there. Glad it had a happy ending, atleast for Victoria and Adam.

A fine tale of scrofulous scumbags. Almost my distant cousins

A romance about a bunch of losers, surrounded by losers.

TRAILER PARK TRASH BELONG IN THE TRAILER PARK

Great story! ...had me worried about the possible sad ending. Good on you.

Thoroughly enjoyed this read. Then again I feel the same for almost all of your stories. Thanks for your writing

One of his best

When it was said that Adam killed himself, I almost gave up on the story. Glad I read til the end.

This was pure joy from start to finish. Thank you for it.

Great story. Loved every page.

A poor story about trailer trash. You try to make them so poor and so heroic as crimes are committed.

Just my opinion on a shitty story

Scores 1/5 for being too turgid.

Please write more chapters with Tori getting married and having more children... with the love of her life!

Fuck you man. Why degrade and stereotype poor people AND write a shitty ending?

Fucks sake.

- This was going to be the review until I finished reading. Thanks mate. Great story.

And with tongue in cheek, I must point out that its "eh" not "A". More evidence would be the back bacon sandwichs and the plaid jackets.

bartender, I'll have another one, just like this one.

As Bubba used to tell me "as happy as a clam in warm water."

"Then there was the time she invented the air blow job. She held her mouth open so big that she didn't even touch my dick. She just moved her head back and forth while huffing over it." I never had one of those, must be I was never quite the asshole as Zeb, er, Zeke was.

"When my check came and she wanted a shirt or some panties or some other outrageous demand, she'd have sex with me." There's a cure for that, don't let her wear any. It's also great to work with a lady that you dressed that morning knowing she's commando.

"That God awful sound like Satan's claws scratching on the gates of hell." Don't know where you picked this line up, but damn... Lucifer is going to be back for another season.

"Just as I crossed the threshold White hot pain lanced through my body. It was so intense that I actually wet myself." This reminds me of two things: being a kid and trying to figure out why a 5 horse Johnson outboard won't start. Do Not, repeat, Do Not hold the end of the spark plug wire with your left hand and pull the recoil cord with your right to check the magneto! The second is if you are testing an invisible dog fence, again Do Not have your fingers across the prongs of the collar when you cross that magic line!

"Shit, Tammy was a natural born actress. She had to be the Lizabeth Taylor...make that Lizabeth Trailer of the family." Liz was beautiful but she was also a tad dumpy on the bottom end. LMFAO

I was going to suggest another song title for you to write a story about, but wait, you already did here - Toby Keith's "Trailerhood".

"I even had a car. I had a brand new Cadillac XLR hardtop convertible." WTF, over? A piece of shit Caddy? The original Bullitt was in Detroit a few months ago for sale.

"He just nodded his head. We got into his car, a twenty five year old Buick that was held together with duct tape and spit." Had a '64 Buick, ever have to replace a heater core in January, outside in the driveway in Michigan with the wind blowing up your ass coming off the frozen lake?

"I'm the Canadian, "A," said Adam." Stang ought to know a few Canuks, their right across the river.

Yes he's posting on SOL now which is where I'll be when I'm caught up here. Nothing, wrong. with, you, commas, either. Signed: BTW

This story brought so many things to light, that I couldn't believe it. There are lives like this, I guarantee it. Nice story, Thanks...

completely unrealistic...enormously entertaining and, at points, hilarious. 5

I enjoyed this one more than the rest of the stories by .SS06 .mostly because none of it was done for thrills or malice.

Watch them damn Canadians

Another good story and a little humor

I believe he is on the other site - SOL

I WISH THE AUTHOR WAS STILL ACTIVE! MAYBE AS SOMEONE ELSE, BUT WHY? THANX STANGSTAR06

...what some seem to think was a rushed ending. It worked for me. Have you changed your opinion about women?

Top hat to you; I gave a high five.

A SS06 story where the woman wins! *****

The last two pages gave her closure with her family and husband. It freed her and got her situation into perspective, so she could move forward. It was a bit hurried at the end but so what. A great story, usual with this writer. Five stars.

It's like you said, 'Fuck it, let's finish this thing right now.' And gave up.

Gotta love anyone who drives a Shelby !

Would have given 5*, But the ending was a rush n comical at best. It discredit n ruin the story.

I was loving it untill the last page.

4*

It was going so well until the last couple of pages. The ending was so convoluted, it ruined the whole fucking thing.

larious

Funny story. I loved Zeke. lol

the cuckold faggots and feminist scum

I loved it Every bit of it. Anonymous is a loser, He wouldnt know a good story if it slapped him upside his cock sucker. 5 stars

I don't think I need to explain why. Everything in this story disgusted me. I can connect with most characters in you're other stories but this one completely turned me off.

I love your stories but men like that just don't exist. Maybe that why I read these stories. At least in these stories there appear to be real. I have my heart and my life to my high school sweetheart for almost 15 years then he cheated on me with some 22 year old slut. He was my first and only till the day he walked out on me. I was the loving wife, I was the bread winner, I was the perfect daughter in law to his parents and family. I hardly denied him sex and only time I did when when I was working long hours or had just given birth twice. None of that mattered when he decided to cheat. He not just walked out on me but also our 2 children. He won't pay child support. I worked my butt off raising 2 kids myself. Making sure they didn't miss out on anything that other kids with 2 parents had. But I'm just very lousy when it comes to play soccer with my son. My daughter never had a daddy to wrap around her little finger like other princesses had. All they have is a mum who was always working.

.......Butterfly 🌺😢

I thought it was silly, and not in a good way. It was more like. ...stupid. In my opinion,

one of the Mustang Man's worst efforts.

Totally Agree! Perfect summation of a terrible story.

Justifying kidnapping, mental cruelty, illegal imprisonment, rape and cheating makes this one of the most repugnant stories on Literotica.

A rollicking roller coaster of a tale!

I just read for the first time. Great story and excellent work!

It's a well analyzed synopsis of the story and worth repeating so here 'tis again.

((( by krosis666 10/21/13 So...

His wife cheated on him, making him hate women, so he and his war buddies decide to kidnap and brainwash an innocent girl, because this loser can't find a women by himself. He jeopardizes her life by kidnapping her using chloroform, which is highly toxic and deadly, a tiny bit too much and she's dead, but hey, he never hit her like Zeke did. Only he didn't have to, because he's rich, so he pays to have a torture device installed and then proceeds to demonstrate it. Zeke was a wife-beating scumbag, but even he never caused her as much pain as that device. The poor girl falls for him because she's uneducated and was never treated well so she doesn't know any better. When he buys her some clothes and some shiny crap she's never seen in her life, he owns her. What a fucking hero. )))

It's my opinion that krosis666's cynical comments are deadly accurate. That being said, I enjoyed reading the story. Too bad Strangstar couldn't also have had the County Health Dept. track Tammy down at the trailer park and make another TV news splash, after it's learned that she's responsible for spreading a severe strain of Syphilis that she contracted while servicing and being serviced by her strip club customers.

death is not excuse or an answer, TK U MLJ LV NV

StangStar's imagination just ran wild with this one.

Victoria was one stupid trailer trash heifer. But she got the chance of a lifetime. I would have welcomed being kidnapped from my ex. If the kidnapper treated me like Adam treated Tori.

Gave you a 5 to help offset the asshole annony's vote

comic book silly but sorta fun Scotty

The problem with this story is that you have to somehow believe that this many stupid people could somehow get together in one place without there being a Donald Trump rally.

But the title is appropriate: They all would be better off dead.

A fu..king load of rubbish, but quite entertaining, all the same!

First off.... loved your story.No complaints there only praises.Except for the ending bit where Tori says to leave the RF chip system be so as to use it on their DAUGHTER?!? SHE's gonna use a friggin ELECTRUTION SYSTEM ON HER OWN DAUGHTER????

This was a very humorous story. You may have missed a couple of stereotypes about the redneck hillbillies, but what you had was funny. And I really laughed about the Canadians. There were so many humorous lines that I can't remember them all. Thank you for another far-out entertaining and enjoyable story.

it is a good story, a bit more like a comic book, but enough truth about things to keep it going. this could be a movie if someone was inclined.

a really good story FROM RAGS TO RICHES FROM BEING BEATEN ON TO BEING LOVED. 5 STARS PLUS. FOLLOW UP STORY??

RON TEXAS COWBOYRIDECC@YAHOO.COM

I hate you and I love you amazing story

This story would make a fantastic full length book and I would gladly pay for it!

Knowing your writing, SS06, I was nervous and hollering 'No!' towards the end. And then it was perfect and one of my favorites.

That was good....bill

No doubt !

LOL too much fun was had by a - well - a few heh.

Not far from real live. Keep up the good story telling.

This here was the best writin' I've saw since I read "Davy Crockett" by Davy Crockett! Nice to finally read writin' by somebody who really knows what to do with the "English Language"!!!

I actually enjoyed the story and thought it had morally ambigious characters. No one was clearly cut positive or negative.

Tori was probably one of the smarter girls in the trailer park, and maybe even too smart for her own good there. She even had the good sense to use birth control. But, she didn't have much experience outside of that world, so she seemed much more ditzy and hapless within Adam's world. Though she prolly did adjust over time there. She was also conflicted about staying faithful to a husband who had never actually shown her any true love, but only kept her as his pretty trophy.

Tammy could have seemed pretty cold and selfish for the most part. Getting knocked up by her sister's husband. She didn't really take care of herself, getting fat and all, and somehow fits in much more with the stereotype that one has of trailer park trash. She did have some redeeming in what might have been the one real truthful conversation she ever had with her sister Victoria, when they were heading to the 7/11.

Adam was probably the most difficult and he seems to be getting most of the hate by other readers. He could be ruthless in business. He has killed for his country. He got really hurt by someone he prolly cared for a long time. Also he was emotionally the most unstable of the characters. PTS or manic-depressive, or perhaps even both to a certain degree. He could pass from a moment of happiness at seeing Tori relaxed and feeling well, to utter dispair when she responded clumsily to something where he might have expected a different response.

Zeke gets drawn up pretty much with the intent of being the least likeable of the bunch. Personally I love to hate the guy. He's not evil or bad in a classic Hollywood fashion. He is what he is. He's the middle-aged trailer park stereotype through and through. He's the archetypical redneck. He can be mostly mean and petty. Thinking only about money, beer and getting sex. Still, I think he did get off worse than was warrented.

Tela was the most present of the secondary characters, and she was pretty conflicted, having fallen for her former CO and friend, but him not noticing any of this. Having to watch the guy pine and suffer over other women. Glad she got it on with Damon at the end.

People here criticize Victoria for falling for Adam, and cheating on Zeke. But, it's not like she was in any position to file for divorce at that time.

The same people don't criticize that Zeke had knocked up Tammy when Victoria was still fetching him beer and getting slapped silly just for answering with simple logic. Hypocrites anyone?

The basic idea of kidnapping someone to have them fall in love with the kidnapper, reminds me a bit of the film "Atame! - Tie Me Up! Tie Me Down!" by Pedro Almodovar.

In the end Tori is better off with Adam than she ever was with Zeke, and not just financially.

I loved it; ROFLMAO

DKP

Holy Jesus Christ on a fucking moped!

This ending has to be the most unintentionally hilarious thing I've ever read.

StangStar06, you're incomparable.

Zeke paralyzed. Holy Deus Ex Machina, Batman!

Cheers!

Love this one, even those pesky Canucks get some page time. Keep up the good work, I enjoy your sense of wit

His wife cheated on him, making him hate women, so he and his war buddies decide to kidnap and brainwash an innocent girl, because this loser can't find a women by himself. He jeopardizes her life by kidnapping her using chloroform, which is highly toxic and deadly, a tiny bit too much and she's dead, but hey, he never hit her like Zeke did. Only he didn't have to, because he's rich, so he pays to have a torture device installed and then proceeds to demonstrate it. Zeke was a wife-beating scumbag, but even he never caused her as much pain as that device. The poor girl falls for him because she's uneducated and was never treated well so she doesn't know any better. When he buys her some clothes and some shiny crap she's never seen in her life, he owns her. What a fucking hero.

Garbage!!!!!!!!

Yeesh, Canadians! Did you have to bring Canadians into this.

They're just so...so....unbearably smug about overcharging the US for all the oil we import from them.

Now there's a border that really needs a techno-militaristic fence to keep their sorry asses out when the methane ices in the tundra start to melt and they are all migrating south to overrun us.

loved that last part about their daughter

tsssk yeah... Ooookay weird

...but the non-dialogue bits from the redneck characters was way out of kilter with their own speech. Their prose was "college educated", while their dialogue never made it out of the trailer-park.

Too many too serious people out there -

It was a fun story with a way out premise that - for this story worked -

The players were all flawed - nothing new for SS06 - the story was plausibly implausible - again nothing new - and it was all just fun to read . Lot's of one liners and smart assed repartee. Tell them one was named Doug MacKenzie heh

Most of the anon's are crying and bitching, about most of his stories, most have missed alot of the oneliners, such as tig ole bitties.

y'all need to get over it(all of the trolls) If'inn ya don't like readin the stories THEN DON'T read them.If your lookin fer proper english dont look here!.

If you think you can do better, THEN SHOW US WHAT YOU'VE GOT!.

the stories here are for our entertainment, and this story was put right where it belongs.

GREAT FUNNY STORY, Thanks stang and milkothebaby

ED

Ripping good yarn!

I stayed up 'way to late to finish it, and I'm glad I did.

Thanks for the effort.

"Tammy, call me an ambulance!" said Zeke.

Tammy answers..."Zeke, you're an ambulance!"

Older than Henny Youngman, but still good!

This story is NOT a clone of ANYTHING else.

It IS an original!

Too close to current events in real life, to me Adam is a creep. Kyle sounds like he should be on Jerry Springer. Well written but not for me, perhaps as I said too close to current events.

"Hold it right there," said Zeke. He tried to raise his shotgun and Adam snatched it out of his hands. Zeke stood there looking like a Looney Toons character, wondering how his gun had disappeared. Tammy laughed loudly at him and that was all of the humiliation Zeke could take.

That's the funniest thing I've read in a long time that made me LMFAO!!!

Somehow this seems like a creative writing class exercise where you call out random places and people and have to put them all together. Love most of your stuff, but the motivations for action in this one were REALLY weak. Victoria should also have discovered a love of oral sex with Adam ... Mustang added exactly zero to the equation. Surgically implanted pain devices?

Great read. As usual!