All Comments on 'Blackmailing Becca Ch. 03'

keep going maybe both together and more women and your son

You need to make it more humiliating for her shes starting to enjoy the old men now. Make her feel she has no choice. Dont do mum and daughter its been done. Srick with her and old men. Make them get older or more disgusting.

Mmmm how about getting her done over by Darren's sadistic Grandmother after she blackmails her having found out about Albert? Good hard strap-on scene

Maybe fuck mom and daughter together when mom hold Becca's legs so that she could be better fucked and Becca do the same for mom ? Son and father fuck mom and daughter and change ....

There are some good ideas in your stories, even if they are reminiscent of Bambigirl's.

However, there are things you need to work on:

She would not of normally asked her Father in law for the money

She would not have normally asked her Father in law for the money

One of his hands went behind Allison and grabbed his ass cheek.

One of his hands went behind Allison and grabbed her ass cheek.

Alberts, Beccas, Darrens etc. - plural

Albert's, Becca's, Darren's etc. - possessive

I not i

Your tense usage is a mess

Alberts balls began to tightened up

either

Albert's balls tightened up

Albert's balls began to tighten up

t shirt = t-shirt, e mail = email or e-mail.

These errors (and there are numerous other examples) spoil the flow of the stories.

I don't want to put you off writing, just get you to improve it.

Great Story so far. How about when she gets to her boyfriends house he has some friends over and he makes her make it up to him by fucking all of them.