All Comments on 'Blood and Desire'

MORE!!!! This is a great beginning! Cant wait for more! =)

Good beginning, but it'd be great if you could find an editor. Misspelled words, switching from "Wilf" to "I", confusing shifts within scenes all make your reader distracted instead of captivated.

There's some definite potential in your writing, though, so keep on going!

I agree. You could do with and editor. I am also a big concerned about the Twilightesque conclusion to this chapter but I am holding out hope...

you should really continue this story. its a good beginning if you just expand the story. i hope that you write more

I would really like to read more about this story. The beginning is intriguing. you can't just leave me hanging like this. lol. Please continue this story.

PLEASE TELL ME THEIR IS MORE TO THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!! I READ IT A WHILE BACK AND I'M STILL WAITING FOR MORE!!!!!!! PLEASE CONTINUE THIS STORY!!!

god i got to read more lol its great stuff lol

seriously??!!!

Like what the fuck!? You can't seriously be telling me that's all you got. There has to he more in that precious brain of yours. I'll be waiting for the next installment. Don't leave us hanging like that.

You can't just leave it there!!!! I was liking t! More more!!!!! Please!!!!

When will there be another chapter. That was getting me hooked!!

come on guy why the short story;.its been months and still nothing

I hope there will be more coming soon.

Weird!