by Slave_Sara
Thank you for your criticism. I've just reviewed the story and I didn't realise how much I wrote 'hehe' or 'lol'. I have submitted an edit to remove all that unnecessary language and also fixed some typos. Thanks again! :)
please, never again write "lol", or "hehe", or any of that text-message rubbish. It makes the story painful to read.
This was a steamy one, Slave_Sara! Very arousing and panty-dampening - a five star story if ever I read one; thank you, you naughty lady you!