All Comments on 'Business Transaction'

I love love love it when you talk filth and you do it so well - your slutty cum filled cunt indeed :D

And the little details as well, the difference between your character's reaction to the cut and uncut guys hehe - and wow, what a killer ending 'you soon will be'

Top notch

Wow Rosie, That was an amazing story. I could literally picture the London bars, and how they're full of suits on a Friday night. Next time in one I will be looking out for you and Marc. Hot supper you had after your drinks

Great first story, look forward to reading more from you.

Fantastic storytelling...and one of my favourite fantasies, sex with strangers.

Well done!! xx

Great story Fox! :D Gives one very interesting ideas what to do on an overseas holiday ;)

omgosh rosey!!! i am gonna have to relieve some of the tension reading this caused in my own little girl!.....dang.....incredible!

totally hot babes, you are so full of surprises

Outy xxx

Very hot story Foxy one.Very well written. Had me on the edge of my seat with my cock in my hand almost from the beginning.

This is one of the most pointless stories I'v read recently. She plays the part of slut to please her man. The point? Is he training her to be a hooker?

the Ct. Yankee

Thankyou to everyone that read my story and commented. I understand 'the Ct. Yankee' that it is not to everyone's taste and of course your opinion is valid. The whole point is, there is no point, it is a fantasy, an erotic fulfillment for a couple; something that turns them both on if you will. I am not writing factual pieces but sexual dreams and explorations, and this is one of those. Not War and Peace, a mere frippery of decadence and indulgence.

Thankyou for reading and your input.

For all the positive comments, excellent! I am glad you enjoyed my first story and I will be back with more.

Please keep commenting.

I think you set the scene well. I liked the dialog. Some will like the kink here, others won't. You might fix the punctuation which I found distracting. For example '"My name is Marc Feathers" he began' needs a comma after Feathers and similarly for many other instances.

A very good story, Foxy. I liked the imagery, and I find the theme intriguing. My only real criticism is that I would like to know a little more about what the main character is thinking as the scene is progressing. There's some insight into her state of mind, but a bit more of her thoughts and feelings about the whole situation, as well as about her various partners, might make her reactions as her body betrays her even hotter.

Wonderfully told Foxy...You did so well, I can't believe this is your first submission...can't wait for you to write some more..

racy and pacey got me hot and bothered

But there is a valid point to your effort on weak sicko's into male self humiliation and watching big cocks in his wife whore.<P>

The issue is whether you would spend a lot of time writing about something that you didn't like such as this male humiliation & disrespect of men.<P>

Obviously your lead story was one you found exciting as most english cucks are addicted to reading it or writing about it. Why is that? I understand it from your viewpoint - you don't like real men - just wimps into watching who you can humiliate because they require it.<P>

Makes you feel superior eh.<P>

Well you have the right to waste your time and efforts on the very few into your below human convention absurdities. Nothing else gets you excited? <P>

Sorta sad don't you think - preying on the sick wannabe cucks.

Thanks again to all those leaving constructive criticism, LeChat I agree wholeheartedly and hope to rectify that as I go on, rather than get carried away in the moment.

As to the rather interesting 'anonymous' comment, I don't think you are reading my story as it was intended. Now whether that is down to my lack of writing skills or how your mind works I have no idea. In response to your question *smiles* no I think I am very far from sick and am sorry that something that is not to your taste gets you so riled up. Please don't allow the door to hit your bum on the way out.

(Why is it I have to rate my own story when I leave a comment, is there anyway around this?)

Well Done, Rose! I just love the thought of you getting all hot and bothered writing this!

Russ

I wonder how you must have felt writing your story...and whether it had some basis in fact or is sheer imagination...so much sex smouldering under such a pretty surface...I won't be able to ever look at your av in quite the same way again. Well done sweetie, you sure had an effect on me....

ERF, i loved this story. The words flowed easily from the page into my mind. More importantly it was sexy... arousing... just plain hmmmm!

I am really looking forward to your next one.

Thanks ERF, and keep up the good work.

Raph

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I loved the story, especially since it was written by such a Fox.

A lack of a comma didn't detract from my enjoyment. I hope to see more from you.

Regards.

So so hot!, but I expected that from Rose!

Very sexy! I loved it!

Hi, Just wanted to say that I loved the contrast of romance and hot sex, I thought you did that very well. It lifted what would otherwise have been a bit of nastiness into a very much more exciting and arousing story. Thank you

This is a wonderful first story.

Please add more chapters to this hot lady's story!

Truly a terrific story. The wanton need and the wanton greed! The innocent yet so irresistible fuck!

The descriptions were wonderful and the story got me VERY excited and kept me excited!

I truly cannot wait to read more from you!

This story was extremely arousing and very well written! I am proud of you, Foxy!!

I hope you came as hard when you were writing and researching this as I did when I read it. Outstanding!

A very good and arousing read :D

Great work, shall look forward to reading more by you!

As you will know I haven't been around Lit for a while, and I was so pleased on my return to find not only your AmPics page, but your first story too!

The plot is not my "thang" but the writing was as erotic as one would wish for. You are so delightfully dirty I am sending hug vibes all the way down to you.

Looking forward to more from you.

Nice first story. Hope we see more from you.

Very hot story. I can hardly wait for the sequel.

This story gave me outstanding visuals, it was very well written and kept me hard the whole way thru.

Rob

too stunned to type = HOTTTT!!

I loved this! Well written vivid and oh so exciting!

Great job!

Loved it. Hot, dirty and turned me on a treat.

A very eloquently written story, just when i thought the story

had peaked, it went on to greater height's almost like an orgasm in writing......cool,

great story, not the typical, thats for sure.

you know its a great story when you want to write the author and say thanks, but you have to finish jacking off first.

thanks that was a very hot story.

Foxy! I have only just made my way to this little corner of the web, and I wish I'd made it sooner. Delicious stuff. Do, do, do, do write more! This reads very well...

Aside from some of the words used -sorry there are some that just made me cringe and I wouldn't use them in my writing -it was quite captivating. Brilliant :)

Very erotic! Had me hard enough to hammer nails by the time i finished reading it!

Love the attention to details. Makes me feel like I am there, a part of the action. Thanks

The combination of rather elegant prose, hot action and absolutely filthy language is explosive! Loved it, wish you would write more!