All Comments on 'Cass's Capture Ch. 04'

very well written.the story line may not be really unique,but the way you have put it,...that was awesome.keep it up

--------------------------your reader,kheya

I like the story. My recommendation would be: double check your grammar and spelling. When you change the point of view between Colin and Jack, try to make them sound a bit more different when they talk... subtle linguistic differences are important. Add little bits of detail to the surrounding environment so the reader can better picture what the characters are seeing and what's going on. And keep writing, you have talent.