- Sci-Fi & Fantasy
- Catching a Fairy
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All Comments on 'Catching a Fairy'
by NiceGuyA11ways
- 13 Comments
Anonymousover 3 years agoI think it was a great story and I really hope that you keep writing more! Keep up the good work! :)
GoesGruntover 9 years agoGood story! More than entertaining enough to call for a follow up.
"...or I have to back at you..." I think you might want to add 'get' between 'to' and 'back'.
"You don't have to I could just use the company." could really use some punctuation between 'to' and 'I'. Either a period or a comma with 'but' after it.
luapzurc1altalmost 11 years agoA little more background on the characters would be nice, especially the fairy, but perhaps you could save that for a sequel.
Action was quick, arguably, too quick, but it's otherwise fine.
There were some spelling errors here and there, and the comma is your best friend for long descriptions, but with a story this long, it's okay.
All-in-all, a great story. Would love to read something like it again.
NiceGuyA11waysabout 11 years agoAuthorThanks for the review I am glad that you guys liked it enough to comment and I will let you know that I plan on continuing this story as a series. Also I plan on writing several other stories that may also turn into series, I hope you guys find the time to read and review those as well.
Regards, NiceGuyA11ways
Anonymousabout 11 years agoA nice start don't know about anyone else but I kept expecting her to change size
Anonymousabout 11 years agoI agree totally with the first comment. It could also use some editing. But if this is really your first attempt, in time you'll rock!
engagemindabout 11 years agoOne can always find ways to improve but in general, good original story. Keep writing and if interested I have several stories (engagemind) wish I had more time to write.
variabledarkabout 11 years agoI agree with anon who said there is potential and that character development could have been more. Keep going there is a possibility that this could turn into a good series.
Anonymousabout 11 years agoIt was well written, and had a decent story line. I would personally liked to have seen a bit more developmental with the characters, but for a first story you're off to a good start.
