All Comments on 'Caught'

You seemed to rush your way through this story. The beginning started well, but things that happened after that were poorly described. It became difficult to follow what was happening and, in spots, who was speaking. Give it another try -- indulge yourself and take time to paint the action more fully.

Sounds like it was written by a 16 year old.

Drivel

It's hard to comment on one or two paragraphs. There's no who, when, or where.

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