by Floater
The storyline is cute and promising.
Wish you had done more with it and earned a "5".
Other episodes could have been added to the classroom episode and the bedroom episode. A longer story would have allowed for more character and plot development. More physical descriptions would have helped the reader in envisioning the scenes.
Thanks for a nice story. Best wishes for future writing.
What a great setup! Love the idea of a gal playing him like that, punching all the right buttons. And the little twist at the end, with his mom catching him - you could really go places with this one, having Charlene incite him to do all KINDS of things, from peeking on his mom, to Charlene seducing his mom while he has to watch, etc, etc. almost limitless possibilities.
Hope to see more from you soon.
Thanks for sharing
- Hooch