All Comments on 'Chastity Chronicles Pt. 02'

Once again, an excellent story!

Wonderful writing and story telling, and sexy too…..arousing!

Just the right amount of context to make all the pieces fit together.

One little problem: is the new artist Billy or Ricky?

Dammit I did it again. The young artist is Billy not Ricky. I’m so sorry. I suspect I’ll get more hate comments again. Some people love to spew hate for minor issues like these.

I have to repost this story anyway. The moderators stripped all my bold and italics again destroying aesthetics and flow. I really don’t understand what they do. Their formatting is terrible and destroys readability. That said some are terrific (example: Schooling of the Spellcaster - I always want that moderator).

My apologies folks. Corrected story will be posted by me today and then by the moderators in 3-4 days. Hopefully.

Loved the story, and the flow right up until the ending. I would have preferred you stopped right after "This Is Billy, from the gala last night" but it is not my story. This story was about Ben, so hinting at the next in line made sense, but starting his story seemed awkward to me. Either way, I enjoyed the read!

It is said that poetry is a magic garden with real toads. Good erotica is a magical sexual garden with real people. So OK--maybe the people are a little magical too, but you have only so many words. Charming.

I loved these lines, "No. You're just right. Little girls like Sandra still remember playing house. Me? I remember the last time I got laid. You need someone with experience. That's me. Do you trust me, Ben?"

I loved the whole story. That said, to me the ending feels rushed and too full. Here are a few more reactions to consider. Starting with the gala, the whole pace shifts and the story gets a bit overwhelming. This is especially true of the phone call at the end. That could easily wait for the start of the next story. This is a great series; it does not need a teaser to get the reader to return. In part, the first two stories work because they stand on their own.

All of that being said, I love the series so far.

Lana, you are a wonderful storyteller. I can give no greater compliment. A publisher once told me that while those having "Master" in English were dime a dozen good storytellers were damn hard to find. You are one! Thank you... :-)

Fantastic & fantastical. Keep 'em coming.

Just awesome! is the only comment I can muster right now. It seems so realistic and sensous. As with your other stories, you are the master (mistress?) of describing a scene in just enough words.

Another 5 stars Lana Ocean!

Your dialog is natural & exciting.

The joy you give & receive with your teaching skills curl my toes. ~;~