by Victoria123
I can't wait for chapter 3
at least tony got his from master Anthony. :)
mistakes and minor detail errors, but nothing major. Would definitely suggest proofreading thoroughly if you don't have someone to edit for you. Though the mistakes aren't taking away from the story too much. I like where the idea is going, can't wait to read more :)
That's it Christine, fight the good fight!
Boo hiss for Anthony! And his aim was off by a couple feet low in regards to Tony... Just saying...
But you do need to correct a lot of spelling errors...seamen FFS !!
It is also interesting to know how you strip and unclip a bra while handcuffed ?
Be interesting to see where you take this one.
Great start! I look forward to reading more about Anthony and Christine :-)
God, I hate retarded pseudo-Romance Novel lines like "this can be Heaven or Hell". It's fucking moronic, and suggests that all women are nothing more than dumb sluts whose only idea of Heaven is being locked up in a room away from their friends, family, job and the rest of the world and waited on until some rich asshole decides to choose her among the many woman he's got locked up in his mansion as "property". Heaven? Please, it's male fantasy. Don't insult us by suggesting it's female fantasy as well.
This guy is apparently supposed to be smart. Don't make him into a complete retard by having him talk like that. Nobody with a brain believes that shit, and if they're as criminal as he's supposed to be, he'd be eating lead faster than you can say "holy shit, this guy is a fucking idiot".
Well its never going to be one of my favorite abduction stories, but its not the worst I have read. I see some potential, but i have so admit i didn't really enjoy reading it for some reason. Who knows *shrug*
Anthony pulled her skirt up and panties down?????? Wasn't she naked? Did I miss something?
I am enjoying the story however. Would love to see where this is gonna go.
Sorry!! I DID miss the part where she put her own clothes back on. I read it again. My apologies.
It's going well...nice couple of chapters...and a way to go, I think. Well written, imo.