All Comments on 'College Homecoming'

$100,000 mansion? Hell that wouldn't even buy a small house with today's prices.

Proofreading is just the start of it.

Okay, so there were a couple of errors. Those can be fixed by simply having someone else edit. The basic idea is good, and I can see several more stories coming out of this. Treat this as a rough draft and go on from here to make the story better.

Seriously? A mansion for $100,000? Did you forget a set of zeros?

Sounds like the character is a Mary Sue for the author...stopped reading after the third or fourth paragraph.