All Comments on 'Coming Hard'

This had potential, but there were so many wrong words/misspellings that there was no way the plot could advance. Not a bad story, as such, although very simplistic, but it would help a lot if every 100th word was not erroneous. Keep working at it, but get an editor!

sorry for all the errors! this would definitely be reason enough not to press "submit" when drinking and writing in a hurry...