All Comments on 'Coming Hard'

sorry for all the errors! this would definitely be reason enough not to press "submit" when drinking and writing in a hurry...

This had potential, but there were so many wrong words/misspellings that there was no way the plot could advance. Not a bad story, as such, although very simplistic, but it would help a lot if every 100th word was not erroneous. Keep working at it, but get an editor!