by nightscribe
fantastic.plese continue this story.can't wait for the next installment.
Can't wait to see where Mike goes from here Excellent reading.
Fine writing but ineffectual villains and women who are more pliable then Barbie drain tension and cum as one. Excellent stroke story but in last chapter you had XXXxcellent twist to supplement action.
Great story. The only problem is Howard, I hope he will be punished because fucking his 2 daughters is not a punishment and he deserves one.
I thought Mike was angry with Howard for trying to sack his mum. How is he punishing him?
I agree. How was that punishment? Wiping his memory? Besides multiple males active and sharing girls is as gross as it gets. Ruins the whole point of a mind control story.
the simple meaning of punishment is to make someone suffer either painfully physically or mentally....however in this case neither did mike bodily harmed howard nor did he emotionally scarred him....not only that but he allowed him to orgasm thrice....kinda beats the point dont you think?
But you make the sex boring!
Exactly the same acts in exactly the same sequence. even the exact same dialog And we certainly know your favorite kink, by now
And as others have pointed out how is making Howard forget, punishing him in any way.
And if he DID forget, what will he tell the police when he discovers his classic 'Vet missing?
Treating women this badly can make sense if there's a desire for revenge ... but only if they've committed really heinous acts against someone who needs to be defended. There's really none of that here. Just because they're rich, maybe?
Howard deserved punishment, sure, but he didn't really get any - because he'll forget everything.
I wish he would learn more control over the Compulsion so that can subtly influence instead of using it like a sledgehammer to completely overpower his victim's will. Then it would feel more satisfying because it's more of a persuasion than totally usurping their will. It's like rape vs consensual sex - it's generally more satisfying if your partner is willing. The MC is just going around raping whomever he wants, not that I'm against that in a mind control story (it goes with the territory I suppose), but I prefer when it's more subtle than just brute-forcing them every damn time.
As for Catherine and John, I would first make sure he isn't cheating on her before sending her back to him; if he is then claim her for yourself, Mikey boy.
Finally, and I'm not the only one that noticed this, there seems to be an excessive amounts of blowjobs and face-raping in this story. I wonder if the author is trying to tell us something. All the sex seems to be the same as well. It does get rather boring after a while. More plot, less blowjobs. It wouldn't hurt to be a bit more descriptive on the sex and some extra sexy dialogue too, but he needs to leave more of their will intact for that I suppose.