All Comments on 'Daddy Knows Best'

Its short but good better than some if mine keep up the good work :-)

You constantly switch from 1st person to third person to alternate 1st person and it doesn't work. People need transitions. Professional writers rarely switch narrative perspective and when they do they let you know that this is what they are doing. Successful writers never switch 1st person narrative without some kind of clue that this is about to happen.

I understand why you would feel like I was using third person or an alternative first person, but I didn't use alternative 1st because the "Me" in the story was the narrator the entire time. Also, I didn't use third person either, I used 1st person Omniscient throughout the entire story.

Thank you for the feedback though and I understand how it can be confusing with me popping in and out of both of their thoughts. Luckily I don't write this way very often.

It was a great story. Thank you for sharing. Looking forward to reading more.

Dear goddess yes... You are an amazing author. Drew me in quickly and wrapped me in a heated emotional sexual blankie. Well done <3