All Comments on 'Darkest Temptations Ch. 02'

I love a good vampire story, and this one promise to be one. I can't wait on how Dimitri and Alera's story unfolds.

Your story shows great promise. I look forward to watching Dimitri chase down Alera. She already has him distracted from the task at hand which of course is to find out who killed the 5 vampires. I hope chapter 3 doesn't have a long wait in coming because I'm looking forward to reading it.

I was wrong...

Still a good series though.

keep 'em coming!

k_k

Get an editor who's native tongue is English because your story is rife with English colloquialisms that you don't know and are writing incorrectly. Also, your sentence structure needs help. Good luck!