All Comments on 'Daughter's Amnesia'

Regardless of the inconsistencies mentioned by other reviewers--the end of this story was a let-down. If this ending was intentional...then it sucks! If, however, this is the first installment of a series even if just one more installment to finish this thread...then I recommend you state that fact. I was thinking that she might hit her head again and revert to her true self. Or he hits his head and something else happens. But to leave your readers with this ending, in my opinion, is inconsiderate or you being a poor writer.

...it's not meant to be reality. If you don't like it, don't read it. Simple.

I actually enjoyed it and read the whole thing. I personally could follow it and didnt care how she paid for her shit not the point or needed. imo. I would love to read a part two of how they are getting along does she get knocked up does she remember etc

ignore the haters that can't handle non consent in works of fiction. Hate to be in a movie theatre where the story involves murder or torture

Also apartments are easier to afford if you aren't paying for gas, insurance, repairs, inspections, and vehicle maintenance

More. Love this story

Loved this story. I hope you write chapter 2.

Down on her luck, Sophia has lost her apartment at college and needs to find housing; she locates her long-absent father, "David" who is willing to take her in--for nefarious reasons. After he gets her drunk, he beds her with a wham bam, thank-you ma'am fuck! When she awakens after heavy beer drinking, when she awakens she's dizzy, she falls, hitting her head causing a concussion/memory loss. He father tricks her the next day, as them being lovers and his name as "David," or Dad if she feels like and prefers doing so; she goes with "David."

This story is very well written. The theme and plot is somewhat unusual but easily believable. Her father's motives are to use her for his long-missing fuck-buddy (his long ago divorced ex-wife/Sophia's mother) which he needs (sex) badly, and uses his daughter often. Unfortunately, her father never develops any stylistic moves of foreplay nor concerns for pleasuring his long-missing daughter.

The story needs a second chapter; Sophia's father needs to realizes how very lucky he is to have her back in his life, and begins to sincerely treat her as a much needed, loving and appreciated life-partner and mother to their children.

I loved this story but the previous poster is right - You need a NEXT chapter and FATHER needs to start making love to his daughter/wife, as least to show his appreciation for having her as his lover, or the Amount of Pleasure she gives him, or to show how much he does love her, as his daughter. After all, it's only natural to start making love or loving gestures to someone you've been having wonderful sex with, even this long.

I love impregnation and I love daddy-daughter smut. This hit all the right zones, and it was amazing to read. You definitely have talent for this, as you seem to come up with more ways to describe people who have sex than I have ever seen. Never stop writing.

Also, to everyone groaning and moaning for a next chapter...how about you try looking for it first? They already DID write a chapter two you lazy numskulls.

I think oral and anal sex would solve half the problem.

Okay, so I'll be the fly in the ointment. This story had a lot of promise, but the writing was... Dismal. If ever a writer was in need of an editor, this story is proof of that. It was a struggle to get through it all. I can point out all the mistakes just on page one, but I doubt you'd take it seriously, especially with so many readers blowing sunshine up your ass. It's not your imagination, it your mechanics. Get a GOOD editor. I can't stress that enough.