All Comments on 'Daydream Whore'

to rite? Is it between metal shop and drama at school?

Not to be cruel but besides being very crude and non-sensical, it was very confusing and it certainly wasn't arousing.

I felt embarrassed for you. Suggest you read and practice writing before another attempt. Ok?

Hell I WANT to agree with them. Use your imagination to jack off with, not write stories that get unsuspecting people to read..

especially the phone call to your brother! but you were supposed to call your dad too. i want to hear that, and when you get home as well. btw, if a critic can't even spell the word write right, you can ignore everything they say. :)

Nice first story...you had me wanking the entire time...

The title has nothing to do with your story.

You should have either retitled it or told the

readers that it was an introduction and stated

that it was " Chapter one".

I, for one, could care less about your earlier

experience that may have lead to the cumulation,

if, it ever really did happen.

I liked it for the depravity. Please ignore these idiots who criticize you. This forum is for fun and if you can't have fun, why are you reading? The story is "not as advertised?" In the title she says "whore" and she certainly lived up to that moniker in the story.

Imaginative and brilliantly told. I absolutely loved it. Keep writing but turn off this comments thing and don't let these losers discourage you. Keep on writing!!!

This is disgusting being words. What husband doesn't want his wife to be a whore?

are great for young guys, just pump and go. I cant imagine a man with self esteem marrying you, but this world does have crazy in it.

Ready for the rest of the story…