All Comments on 'Divorce'

and looking forward to part two! Very intriguing about how you worked the friends in and how they are working into him!

Geez, I'm just glad the story is so short. It started out decently and then made such a left turn that with only a few strokes, I was totally turned off.

Maybe I don't understand the genre, but this was pretty bad.

The story makes no sense. The start was, well, adequate. But then, logic was completely abandoned.

did i miss something ... did he not just backhand her throught the door... there is always other lawyers and lol it dont look like he will have to give up anything he gets it all ... is this your first time writing ...if so it shows ... as they say try try again till you get it right ... and boy do you have a long way to go baby

don't stories usually have a point, some kind of development in plot and character, and an end?

started out ok. Went to shit from there. Not much more to say.

dave

Is your hero an animalistic pussy author (see bio comment) or

How to turn a good start into a swamp without interest!!

Why? Not erotic or sensual - just sudden sickness of your mind eh!!!

I never saw the plot twist coming and I was surprised. But once you opened this other door you left me cold. If that was your intent then you succeeded.

first few paragraph was ok but other than that not yet ending yet. so what happen after that???????

More like an introduction and barely enough information at that. This whole thing seemed silly. Why were any of them doing what they were doing? This wasn't even a trainwreck. It was a trainwreck wanna be.

You should not write anymore

A dyslexic 5 year old could do better than this!

Ok start, kinda jumpy, now bring it together so it gets some sense out of it