All Comments on 'Eleanor Rigby: Choices and Consequences'

He should have gotten a post nup signed before the reconciliation.

Don’t like what Jen said to her father. If my daughter said that to me in that situation there would be very bad issues between us. She is challenging her father and he let her walk over him. What does she challenge him on next. I know she wants to keep the family together but challenging the father is not the way to do it. If this was my daughter, with that one sentence she would seriously damage her relationship with me, and would need to rebuild it so I could trust that she sees my point of view as well. Made this a bit of a personal comment but didn’t know how elder to put my view across.

This version is better than the original part 2 but still disappointing. The circumstances around the cheating and the position she was in when she got caught are too extreme to believe forgiveness would come that easily.

The relationship would be over and even if it wasn’t it would take years to get to forgiveness, not a few months. They would likely have to break up and get back together later.

good story not sure about the ending

Excellent writing and dialog. Not a fan of reconciliation in this case - MC gave in far too easily and not enough consequences for the cheater.

A good version of the finish to HDKs story. I commented on that one that I felt the second part wasn't quite as good as the first. I still feel the same with this. But it was a very well written piece. BardnotBard

I gave this story 4 stars, but for the writing & story telling. The action within... that's another story. While I'm in favor of reconciliation where warranted, I'm not sure here it is. Ellie didn't cheat once, but 3 times, probably more by the story & her telling of events. There's no mention of her getting STD tests. It seems that the husband took to a 2nd chance too fast, even though a couple months past. What didn't help was that she didn't readily cut the friendship with Helen, but in a way was forced to.

So while I give the story 4 stars, I given the action within 2. Bob

Nice writing. Not my type of ending. No BTB but I would have asked for a divorce.

Another spineless husband. One minimum requirement should have been the signing of a punitive post nuptial agreement. With my background there would have been an ex-wife and two dis-inherited daughters.

Could have been a good idea, but a little long on words, short on actual meaningful action to demonstrate any repentance on her part. The part with the daughters trying to intervene at the end seems stupid. A little bit repetitive, kind of drags things down.

Ended better than I thought it was going to but in this he was wimp to the end he should have gone after the former boyfriend.

My opinion is that he should have dumped her at the get go. But the reconciliation was well done and different people have different views so getting back together worked for him. 4 stars.

Bill S.

Interesting to see the similarities and differences to the story sequel by harddaysknight.

I would have laid into my daughter for talking like that to her father. I would hope to never be in that situation but it's not their place to be involved.

He felt he did something wrong? He allowed almost grown kids to not only insert themselves, but to take her side,and to threaten him? Just wow.zero self respect, the way of modern man. Shw as warned, then after the fact wants to make it up. Coulsd some genius cuck author please explain exactly how makig it up is done? Buy an unfuck machine? Please , just exactly how is it done?

What a bunch of California style psycho-ology ... Make the husband, somehow feel like he set himself up to be cheated on. Then let the whore stay close until the next guy shows up . How insane of an idea . 2 stars

I especially like the consequences of telling the kids, both parents and REMOVING the best friend. Let’s just say that rings very true to me. 5*

Did not like it. Loved the writing but the kids should have not gotten involved. She screwed around after being warned. 4 months is allot of time but he paid a heavier price then she did. She feared the repercussions of her actions but not the deed of what she did. In short the husband is a little bit of a cuck

Thank you writingdragon, this was a great sequel, you did a very good job!

He has deep seated fear she will trade up. At first chance with old flame she does exactly that...

He should have divorced her.

In real life a woman like that would walk away with the lesson that if caught she can cry her way out of trouble. That woman would cheat again but would be more careful.

Awesome job at closing up this piece that seem to be left waiting for someone like you to come along properly finish it!!

albertin55@gmail.com

He should have dumped her

The kids getting involved spoiled it. They should have been dealt with and then mom n dad could work out a reconciliation or a divorce , whichever way it went.

You got tired or ran out of ideas after daddy beat up her lover. You rushed the end to get it finished. That’s sad.

I liked it ,you did both sides well

WTF, the Kids taking the moms Side solves it?? Shitty way to tie a bow in a heap of excrement.

I get its hard when there are kids involved but this deserves nothing less than a divorce.

So .. a daughter wants dad to accept the cheating slut of a mom?…Dad.. please explain to any prospective suitor of hers what they are in for!

So, daughters take skank side and he apologizes? Hubbies fault? This author is starting to specialize n willing cucks. Very distasteful and full of garbage. Not a valid effort. One star.

Well done.

Had always thought the original 'award speach' ending didn't do the story justice.

That said, you did get a bit winded but you did wrap up story with a better conclusion.

It's funny how some leave me feeling like the reconciliation supporters are pussies but there are a few stories where the critics of reconciliation seem like pajamas in their parent's basement pimpled keyboard tough guys who have never actually had a woman they didn't pay for.

Good story, but I did not like his daughters great near the end if he did not reconcile. They should have stayed out of it other than being supportive.

Not mine. It got freaking sappy at the end. The errant wife analysed her behaviour as if she had been led on by a counselor.... Nope!

“none of this lets you off the hook” as he immediately lets her off the hook

Zero consequences. Willing cuck. Yup, always the husbands fault. Surprised we did not have a counselor and wife ganging up on him for all his misdeeds. Cucks get one star. Cucks are disgusting and pathetic.

There are those whom I'm thankful they no longer contribute to this site. "writingdragon" is among those...

stupid piece of crap writing. minus 10 stars.

...Helen did nothing to “push” Ellie into Dan’s arms. Ok, she did remind Ellie about the high school relationship itself, but she sure didn’t say ‘You should go for it’.

When the curtain finally dropped at the fund raising offices and Ted showed up to pick Ellie up, as far as I can tell in HDK’s original story, Helen “voice” didn’t say she thought Ellie was in the office screwing around, seemed smirk-less and innocent.

“I haven't seen her lately, but she is probably in the office getting all the games and tickets ready, Ted," responded Helen. "Want me to look for her?"

There was no “WAIT! DONT... go in there.” Or furtive looks of smug satisfaction.

Just an observation.

He wimped out. She got away with being a whore for another. What were her consequences?

None, in the end, none!!!!

Worth 2/5

she did not go to his work and confessed, some other husband did that, which means that she could not do that even when her husband demand it

the ending is not convincing, she did not go back to her husband except after she had no other options

This was a good ending to the first story but is lacking in its own ending.

I guess my own imagination isn’t that good because I like total endings.

Then I don’t write stories either.

Four stars ⭐️ .

Bill

I really like this sequel to the story. It's just the way it should have ended.

Once again, reconciliation is fine but he should absolutely fuck any woman he wants to from this point on. And rub her face in it every time.

How many times if not caught?

Huh

jtwheels

Caught in the act the first time is one thing, but 4 times before that is premeditated and NOT forgivable. I gave it 4 stars for the good writing but couldn’t go for the 5th star because her actions. To me, the stars for a story reflects not just the author’s work but also the plot.

Stories I read on lit was HDKs original, I loved it and actually felt for poor Eleanor. Reading your version I want to see her burned at the stake in town square. I think you added some details to the original, that caused my change of heart, thus it did not feel like the same characters. Still good effort.

Five times with all the other betrayals. There are consequences when she made many, many bad choices and she has to sit in the corner for 5 minutes. Bullshit.

He was to easy on her...Cheating does cause to much pain...He should have made her sign the divorce papers...and then make her fight to win him back...that would have made a better story...........

I really didn't like when his girls threatened him near the end. His wife should have stood up for him and told them to back off and that it was all her fault not his.

.... yeah thats it! you took a good story by HDK and made it a cucky wimpy ending... and u call urself writing dragon? can ya pse change ya name to writingfaggot?

all she did was say I'm sorry over and over. Everyone know she's sorry. she's a sorry piece of trash. And in this case she's already infected the kids with her whorish ways.They are on her side no matter what, so he should go ahead be content being a cuckold for life. Or dump the slut and her minions now.

So the loving wife cheated on her stupid husband and slept with the guy her husband hated five times. How did the husband retaliate? He retaliated by banishing his wife's best friend from his house and by making his wife accuse her lover of sexual harrassment. Did he divorce her? No. Wow what a smart man! 1 bright star for this jewel of a story-telling.

One might be able to understand and maybe accept a stumble and a one night’s stand but three separate instances is unforgivable. Contrary to his daughters’ wishes the only choice here was to BTB and find someone else. With his reputation he wouldn’t have to look far or very hard for a suitable replacement!!

Like to see more of how it goes. Thanks

I am with Anon 11/23 but with a small footnote. I don't know what kind of peace and happiness is possible living with such a cheating bitch! In addition, what lessons does this teach two impressionable and emotional daughters. This ending is unsatisfying and unsatisfactory. I would prefer a bit more of a "saddletramp" slant on this. Dan getting a 'lesson' is OK but what about the slut? Ted is now walking on a tightrope and not likely to be at peace with his 'new' relationship with Ellie In real life this marriage is a zombie ready to rise up from the dead and do great damage to Ted and the girls! Good story, well written but I feel like the end has yet to be 'written; 3***

i bet should the cucks daughters marry a man that cheats on them that they will stay

given the daughters attitudes I would stay with the whore and once a year take a two week vacation alone, the same two weeks the whore was cheating, and I'd enjoy my self with as many women as possible, and I would tell each of my daughters husbands what their stance on staying with a cheating spouse is and testify on their behalf show the little whores decide being married to a cheat suddenly inst really that important

Second time. Really like this finish to the story, especially the complete destruction of Dan.

The story was well written and worth a highest rating, but I still didn't like him taking the blame for her BFM. I call bullshit. It wasn't a mistake, it was a deliberate act, multiple times. There was no love, only selfishness.

detroitdave

I liked HDK's ending a lot more. *2*

Any father worthy of the title would have (1) kicked the wife to the curb, especially in light of the fact that she didn't rebuke her bitchlets for their comments and injecting themselves into the issue and (2) would have told the bitchlets that he hopes they enjoy living with their mother. His failure to do those things taught the bitchlets the wrong lesson.

But you told the story very well. Loved Dad taking care of Dan again, although hubby should have been the one to take out the trash. Reconciliation a little too quick, guess it was for the kids. Wife seems remorseful, but should be made to work very hard to regain trust from husband.

Fairly blatant betrayal, and the only reason it stopped was an ugly discovery scene. Granted, she's only getting the chance at this point, but it seems a low-cost path to recon. Sleeping in the guest room and counseling?

Pathetic Raac. Husband is wimp coward who huffs and puffs but does shit.

Much of the dialogue here was stilted and unrealistic. People don't talk like that in real life. Other than that, an OK story. --JRZ

HDK IS BY FAR THE BETTER! Nice try but alas it just not quite what I like 4★ WOOF!

Although Jerry Springer would love It! JERRY! JERRY! JERRY! ( I can't help myself ) See Ya!

For all the reasons the husband said. She did nt just fuck the interloper. She took time and love away from her husband daughters and family unit.

No way would I take her back.

I was hoping you were going to take your time to write a great reconciliation story. It was not. Just a good sequel. It take a really great and talented writer to turn around a cheating story into a believable reconciliation tale. And while you didnt write a RAAC, I think the story needed more development to make it a believable tale. Half the story you basically re-told what had happened. Show more than tell.

The only two great reconciliation stories I've read are Ohio's Ari, and Longhorn07's Requital. And neither of them are two pages long. Good effort, just not enough.

I don't even know how old this story is, but thank you for a happy ending. We need more of them.

I need happy endings.

An RAAC? Seriously? Pathetic!

It was not a mistake but a deliberate choice. Repeatedly. She wouldn't have stopped if she wasn't caught.

She does not love Ted. If she did she would never have considered having an affair. When you love someone you are always thinking in terms of the spouse. You do not have an affair because you know it would destroy your spouse, therefore you can only have the affair if you do not love them.

The affair started when she started having get together deliberately without her husband. She was cheating on Ted even before the first kiss. There is no "technically" about it. She was giving to Dan what she was not giving her husband. And she knew it was wrong, but kept doing it. She did it in secret because she absolutely knew it was wrong.

If you can't do it in front of your spouse you shouldn't be doing it.

She says she will do whatever to get back with Ted, but immediately balls on separating with Helen and going to Dan's workplace. Certainly seem like she really wants to get back together. The smart thing would have been to drop her at that point because clearly Ted and the family are not important enough to her.

Terrible resolution. If she was real I give her 2 years before she cheats again. She already broke a bunch of promises and vows without consequences. She told Ted not to worry and then went out and did it anyway. So she tells him she loves him and won't do it again, but of course she can't be trusted.

A few points just do not sit right with me. First, the psychobabble about lack of closure with Dan in high school. Just the kind of comment that reinforces the futility of counseling in adultery situations. It simply provides an excuse to make her feel better about herself and convince her that she wasn't totally responsible for her actions. Utter nonsense.

Secondly, this quote spoken by Ted is key: "Although I am reasonably sure you are genuinely sorry and repentant over the whole issue". But is she sorry for the affair or because she got caught? At no point does she acknowledge that she wanted to be seduced. She knew all along that their meetings, dinners, hand holding, etc was going to lead to just what she wanted i.e. sex with Dan. Until that issue is in the open and resolved, Ted is a fool to reconcile.

When daughter threatened father he should have told her GOODBYE!

Daughter thinks adultery is ok

Pity her future husband

wimpy cuck shit.

I think everything that was said in his comment reflected my exact thoughts … except for saying you are a good writer. I think you have potential but there were far too many faults in the technical writing and to be a good writer you have to develop the characters and story.

I didn't get the impression that you believed in the characters as real people. They were devices for you to use in a series of rambles.

So I'm probably a bit more harsh than anonymous 11/30/2016 but it is with the hope that you learn to think about the characters more and to flesh them out better as well as either get an editor to check your work or for you to realise that you have to check your work more fully. Perhaps write it. Leave it a while then check it because, I know form experience that checking a freshly written essay is far harder than going back to something cold.

Keep going, there's something there but, like many of us, you are not the finished article yet!

This and HDK's original aftermath are decent stories. I was put off a bit towards the end as his forgiveness was not very well explained and rushed. Also you changed from 3rd to 1st person too many times to count... 4* effort thanks!

I don't necessarily want a BTB ending for every cheating wife, neither do I want a RAAC in every case. Many times I root for the husband and wife to find an way to stay together, but NEVER at the cost of the husband's honor or self-esteem. Often times there's no good way to do it; the affair was too public, too egregious, too cold and cruel - or the wife simply doesn't care enough to put forth the effort it takes to win him back. That was the case here, the wife did the bare minimum while moaning and groaning about what she wants to see happen.

In every story where I wished for a reconciliation, it was ultimately because the author set up a scenario where you truly believed the wife loved her husband, the "affair" was a spur-of-the-moment thing she instantly regretted, and she would do absolutely anything to get him back. I didn't get that from this story or from HDK's original. I think your story was better than HDK's 'Aftermath', but still fell short of convincing me she was anything but a woman scared of an unknown future where she would have to provide for herself.

She had to stop and think about whether or not she could give up her "best" friend. She was extremely reluctant about going to Wilkins's office and accusing him of a moral breach of conduct, whatever that is. If she was willing to do anything to get him back, then she wouldn't have even hesitated to agree to his demands.

In my humble opinion though, it was a mistake to have the daughter threaten her father, to take his wife back or else. Instead of answering with a resounding, "Bring it!", you had the father surrender and tell the wife he'd take her back. Almost as if he was scared of his two little girls causing him grief, the father is doing exactly what the girls demanded. I'm not made that way so it didn't sit well with me; my kids do NOT order me around and they certainly wouldn't dare threaten me - they know better. It was at that point I became disgusted with your version of a RAAC. I don't think the wife was worth it, she certainly didn't earn it, and I would have made those girls rue the day they decided they had the stones to lay down the law. For me, the girls slammed the lid on that marriage and nailed it shut. No healthy family has children acting in that manner.

However, as I said, I enjoyed your version more than HDK's 'Aftermath'. You're a good writer, I like your work and look forward to your stories.

Thanks!

I never liked the original because of the absolutely bullshit betrayal and RAAC that ensued so you really didn't have much to work with from my point of view unless you took it in a different direction, which you didn't.

this woman had a full affair over a period of time and did it intentionally. No way I could ever forgive or forget that.

I liked this ending.

After reading both of HDK's chapter on this characters , I thought there was another continuation of this , so I used Lit's search and found this.

The original series left me sad , so I just hoped that there was a version that would lift my spirits , but sadly it just wasn't meant to be.

The lead Protag is just so damned wimpy.

I am not a straight BTB'er , by any stretch , but somethings just cry out for a little bit of emotional salve for inflicted wounds. Unfortunately this character is simply doomed to die of gangrene .

Total Rat crap

Your writing is readable but this guy is a pussy!

Some of the writing left a little bit to be desired. A few run on sentences and a few fragments that shouldn't have been complete sentences in and of themselves...but from a story telling standpoint I thought this was very well done.

I do, however, have to agree with some of the previous comments in that I felt the reconciliation was forced. To my own thinking, if I tell someone not to do something, plead and beg them not to do something and they go on anyway, they have just demonstrated to me what my opinion is worth and their own opinion about how I feel. Neither of which being cornerstones for a lasting relationship, let alone a marriage. The time to say "I'm confused" is before anything happens...not after. This is particularly true when the exact issue is brought to the fore and put on the table for discussion. Even if the thought hadn't occurred to her before he brought it up, that's the time to say "I hadn't thought of that...let's discuss it." Not "you're an idiot! Now let me go off and prove just how big an idiot you are."

But, not my story. I didn't write it or edit it, just commentary from the peanut gallery.

The title should be "Choices",there were no consequences.

Really , why spread this deodorant on shit?

Getting back together just felt wrong. Even in the original story. She was warned by her husband, ignored his concerns and on multiple occasions had sex with Dan.

Only AFTER getting caught did she feel any real remorse. She said she was confused before she was caught, but not enough to quit screwing another man!

No, they should not have gotten back together.

You take an apple tree, graft pear shoots onto it so that only pears grow, and want everyone to believe its still an apple tree. Try being original or even harder writing something that actually uses the characters and plot of the story you pretend to be extending.

Good writing but how could he ever really trust her again? She was easily persuaded to cheat, didn't want to give up her friend, then apparently got the daughters to switch from his side to hers. All in all almost a perfect recipe for a disaster just waiting to happen in the future. I could see him wanting to not divorce the cheating slut because of the children, but to actually want to return to a real marriage to her? Why? What would he gain but years of distrust and the constant worry about when will she cheat again. The woman described in this story would be almost certain to cheat again by the way, she was just too self centered not to eventually talk herself into believing that she didn't do anything that wrong, especially if she feels that she got away with it by getting to keep her marriage intact after getting caught.

Character mismatch.

Decisive at the start, emotional waffle at the end.

Not saying the conclusion is wrong, just how Ted was portrayed at the end.

I was all going good with the story - for the most part - right until Jen copped the "he better take you back or else" attitude.

It's not her or anyone else's choice as to how hurt he is by what his wife did. If it hurt him too much to get over then they should just feel bad about it but accept it.

I mean, what happened to that "Mom, how could you?" the girls had earlier...?

any of the versions of this story. And like was mentioned before, you can surely tell what kind of raising the daughters got. Cheaters raise cheaters, if nothing else by example. Lack of respect for the husband by the wife shows the daughters how to treat all of the men in their lives. I don't know about handling cheaters all that much, but I had a close example of that growing up and it taints the children in the marriage for life.

As much as the father loved his daughters it is a shame that they totally took the slut side of the marriage to the point of threatening to make his life even more miserable than it already was. He should have just stood on the bank and watched them swim, maybe helped old Dan by throwing him a heavy chunk of concrete to hold on to in the water. If you hit him just right he would have been in the water for a long time.

I love BTB stories and I love when a story unfolds that show the bigger side of human nature. He obviously ask himself the question along the way" am I better off without her". And, he arrived at the answer you gave in the story. I wonder if there are relationships like this that can really recover from the betrayal and restore the trust. I want to believe as you have portrayed that it can be done.

Thanks!

I must say that I agree with most comments...but I also must say that the only Man that resisted to three temptations was Jesus. We all sin some day, for this or for that. And most of the times we repent after failing...She repent herself, she confessed her sins to all, so even being a cheater and a whore, she had the right to repent and to be forgiven. He had the right to not forgive, but he choose to forgive and that was is right too. Will they survive in future to all what happened? I don't know, but at least they have the right and the obligation to try as a family and for the family...

...Ellie is still a whore.

"I've been a whore for an egocentric ass..."

That is an understatement, Whore. If I were your husband, I'd keep you. Keep you in another bedroom, keep you alone. No love, no touches, no family outings, just keep you like a mushroom in the dark.

Years ago, my wife was working as a waitress and I was a carpenter. We were in our late twenties with 2 kids in grade school. I beat my wife home from work one day and was surprised when she came straight to me and let me know her old HS boyfriend, who popped her cherry had stopped by where she worked and stayed there all day. He wanted to 'talk'. At this point, we'd been married over 10 years. After he'd popped her cherry, they fucked for about a year straight before he cheated on her. They experimented and did all the nasty things young lovers do when they are learning.

She said he just drank coffee and watched her and back then, my wife looked good! Finally she had a break and he wanted to know about her life. She had been the head cheerleader, he was the star football player. Me? I was the band geek, that loved her from afar. After they broke up she went through a couple other cocks before I came along and we married.

The main thing he asked her that really caught my attention was "is he (me) treating you alright?" The point being, if he isn't, here I am! My wife let him know in no uncertain terms, she was happily married to the man she loved, had two wonderful children and our life was perfect. She conveyed perfectly that she wasn't interested in the least. He took the message and left, she's never seen him again that I'm aware of, some 30 years later.

Right or wrong, I'm still about 3/4 pissed at my MIL. My wife's boyfriend found her first and she just couldn't wait to tell him where my wife worked and that he should stop by and see her, something he'd already planned on. If my MIL only knew how he used my wife for her cunt and not much else, she would be shocked. Basically, in that year, he never took her on a date, the only times they got together away from school, was when he wanted to fuck her and from what she's alluded to, she let him fuck her every single time, she never said no.

But when the chips were down, the rubber met the road and she not only stayed true blue to me, but immediately came to me and explained what had happened.

Now with Grandkids, our life really is perfect!

Too bad you are a liar. Yup, that's what I said, a liar. There is no way that a person "loves" there spouse and cheats on them. It is a contradiction in terms! Love is a verb! It is an action! It is something you do! To love someone means that you actively care about their welfare and take steps to ensure that they are safe and protected from harm. It also means that you try to make them happy, not sad. You treat them with respect, not contempt! No, she didn't love her husband when she chose to fuck around, in fact she hadn't loved him for a while, if ever. You see, when you love someone for years it becomes a habit, like an addiction. You just can't stop cold turkey and start actively hurting them! So, she didn't love him. She still didn't love him after she was caught, she loved herself and her life, and her reputation. She didn't want to lose those things. She didn't want to lose her husbands love or her children's love. Sure they were sort of siding with her, but in the long run if they had gotten a divorce they would have blamed her and held it against her. That is what women do, they remember and never forgive. So, you are a liar, your protagonist is in denial and if there is any reality in this dimension, he will one day realize this and walk away. It would probably happen when the youngest kid goes to college and they are left alone and he sees the real her for the real POS she is. 4* for the writing!

Another well-written story that cuts off the man's balls and destroys his self-respect.

She cheated not once but several times over 2 weeks and how long for the petting and kissing leading up to the sex. Oh! she never saw it coming, she didn't know she was being played after this guy kept telling her just what she wanted to hear, and she is supposed to be so smart??? But wait, she said she felt "guilty" each time AFTER it happened, until the next time. She felt so guilty that she cut off sex with her husband. Then she had the gall to blame him for not stopping her??? Poor girl, she just wanted to relive her youth. She did tell her husband she was so sorry-again after she got caught. She did receive a lot of good advice in this and the previous story, she should remember it for her next husband.

You're right, you can't turn love on and off like a lightswitch. Especially when your hot ex comes back into town, whom you still love. Oh, did you mean love within the marriage? Ellie didn't seem to have any trouble flipping that switch for a couple of weeks of betraying the man she supposedly loved for sixteen years.

This version was a bit more plausible than HDK's Aftermath, but it's too bad Father McKenzie wasn't around in this version to have a little talk with the daughters about respecting their father (you know, the guy who risked his life to save their mother, even after she stabbed him in the back.) I just didn't see the need for another version of the story that ended with RAAC.

Maybe he got to loving cream pies, cause the cheating slut will be feeding them to him.

Harddaysknight's sequel was much better. Its too easy to paint the seducer as a vile serpent with no redeeming qualities.

I feel it did not fit into the time frame of the story. This section of the story is somewhat disjointed in tempo. The info does fill out the story line but feels almost as a afterthought to a good story.