All Comments on 'English Rose Ch. 01'

You should probably move this story to NonConsent/Reluctance, Lesbian , Fetish or Mind control. I read interracial stories on this site all the time any this one really annoyed me. You're a good writer but you'll get more appreciation in another category.

I enjoyed it,left me wanting more.

Good start, hope they'll a long life together... Thanks

You use halcyon suburbia, Suburbia may be pretentious, oe twee, or many other things but never Halcyon

Likewise Deference, it means exactly the reverse of what you intend, they Defer to you, set aside their desires to please you, I dont know what word you were seeking but these mistakes do jar nd will spoil your stories if you dont take more care.

However its still 5 star as far as I am concerned

An excellent fantasy

Loved this story...i too write stories...can we email each other?

steviedrmckenziem@hotmail.com

Steve